(03-21-2011, 06:22 PM)
The NeoGAF Poetry Corner - Challenge #22: A letter to the world #1
The NeoGAF Poetry Corner - Challenge #22: A letter to the world
Theme: A letter to the world
We were talking about Emily Dickinson in the last thread, or the one before perhaps, and one of her most famous poems is of course, her letter to the world. Hit the link for the actual poem and discussion in the comments beneath it.
We live in turbulent times; more than usual I mean. If you want to address the world right now, then that is absolutely fine. But to those new to the thread, you don't have to address your letter to the world; you can interpret the theme as freely as you want. You could for example address a letter to your self thirty years from now. Be it happy, sad, inspirational; whatever. It's up to you.
Secondary Objective: Inside Outside Poetry
See first post, I've somehow reached the op text limit. :P
Thank you Bootaaay for keeping up the op template. And the regular writers for keeping the thread alive.
Poetry thread Rules version 1.2:
1. This thread is not merely for winning or losing, but for critiquing and improving your own craft.
2. This poetry thread 'contest' will end on a Friday, and voting will last until Sunday at midnight. You cannot win unless you vote. Although you don't have to submit a piece to vote.
3. The winner must then provide the next challenge theme for the following two week period. Some weeks like during E3, this may not be possible, so we will have an interim one week period until normality is resumed. As a general rule, we like to keep this on the alternate week to the Creative Writing Thread.
4. There are no word count limits, make it as long or as short as you want.
5. Optional secondary objectives are not mandatory, you can include them or not.
6. Further addition to rule five: you can also try the secondary objective as a secondary piece. Just make sure you label it as such.
7. Vote for your favourite poems. Voters should award first, second and third places to their favourite three poems. Don't vote for the same author twice. And watch out for pieces that are labeled ineligible - comments on these pieces labelled as such are welcome but you just can't vote for them. Incidentally, feel free to vote even if you haven't submitted a piece - the more the merrier :)
8. During the count, First place is allocated three points. Second place is allocated two points. And third place is allocated one point.
9. In the event of a tie, the tally will be counted again with first place being allocated three and half points. If it isn't resolved then, it will be up to the OP (most likely the previous winner) to decide to how to go about things.
10. Winner gets a round of applause and will have the records stating it as such. After which Rule 3 is in effect and we start a new thread.
Submission Deadline: (PST)
Friday 25th March 11:59 2011
Voting Deadline: (PST)
Sunday 27th March 11:59 2011
The NeoGAF Poetry Society: Alumni's Archive
The NeoGAF Poetry Society: Previous Challenges:
Poetry Challenge #01: Reflection
Poetry Challenge #02: Making the Blind See (+ 5W poems)
Poetry Challenge #03: Interior (+ Incorporate a song or album title)
Poetry Challenge #04: History (+ Dream Song poems)
Poetry Challenge #05: A View From Afar or Within (+ Clerihew poems)
Poetry Challenge #06: The Surreal and the Fantastical (+ Haikus)
Poetry Challenge #07: Expectations versus Reality (+ Ode)
Poetry Challenge #08: Mirror's Edge (+ Rhymes)
Poetry Challenge #09: Look on the Bright Side (+ poem must end with _________________ as it's last line)
Poetry Challenge #10: Obsolete (+ Ink)
Poetry Challenge #11: Pride (+ Kanye West)
Poetry Challenge #12: Passing By (+ Allegory)
Poetry Challenge #13: Take this Society (+ Ballards)
Poetry Challenge #14: The Dark (+ Add Zombies to taste)
Poetry Challenge #15: The Great Winter (+ Elegy)
Poetry Challenge #16: What Nature Reclaims (+ Lay)
Poetry Challenge #17: Storm Clouds Rising (+ First Person)
Poetry Challenge #18: The Phoenix (+ Enjambment)
Poetry Challenge #19: Psychopomps (+ Assonance)
Poetry Challenge #20: Death in the Family (+ Limericks)
Poetry Challenge #21: A Night on the Town (+ Didactic Poems)
Last edited by Ashes1396; 03-21-2011 at 07:15 PM.
(03-21-2011, 06:23 PM)
Inside - Outside Poetry first describes someone as the person he or she thinks other people might see, focusing on those things which they don't especially like. The second stanza then describes the person as the perfect boy or girl of their dreams.
An example from the Poetry Pals Club:
My inside self and my outside self
are different as can be.
My outside self wears fat, baggy clothes.
Two feet like bear paws,
With lots of fears.
My inside self is different you can see.
A rad, awesome dare devil
doing stunts inside of me.
Filled with care, and a gentle person.
A lovely, lovely doctor,
That's what I'll be.
Example two: another example I found on the internet:
Pain of the heart
Pain we encounter our whole lives through in differing degrees,
Pain can plague our bodies from our head down through our knees
Way on down to feet and toes, our limbs, our every part,
Inside, outside, every place; but none worse than the heart.
Some suffer stronger, deeper pain, and some a lighter ache,
Some need strong medication, others an aspirin take.
But when the pain is caused by loss and radiates from the heart
There is no medication; nothing to stop you falling apart.
Your confidence is shaken and your whole world caving in,
Your clouded mind can’t fathom it… your new day can‘t begin,
The heartache travels through the mind, then on down to the soul,
Then to the eyes so sore from tears that you cannot control.
Sobbing makes your tummy hurt, you feel the future’s bleak,
Your throat gets sore, your tongue is tied as tears roll down your cheek.
So never walk away from one who cherished and adored
Your every move, your every word… don’t hurt them with a word.
For one day they may not be there to show your feelings to,
They may have left for other lands, to wander pastures new,
So cherish every single friend and never leave their side,
Hold them to your heart each day, whisper your love; confide.
note: you can either incorporate the secondary and first objective into the first entry or have a separate secondary entry. If you have a secondary entry, it must be an Inside Outside poem, of some sort. Secondary objective is completely optional.
Cheers. That's all folks.
Last edited by Ashes1396; 03-21-2011 at 06:31 PM.
DIXI QUID QUID
(03-21-2011, 06:31 PM)
The butterfly looks just like the moth, especially in the dark.
we sit cold and quiet in the winter park.
Means nothing, it does, you say,
it has to mean something, i say.
within you there's no talent or hope,
just killing time till you die; that's the pessimistic outlook
that you've inculcated within you
since the day you first fell, and never got up.
Outward all smiles and within all boozed up
mockery for all the times you lied and swilled
letting the pigs feed where you dropped,
and when they were done there was nothing left of you.
it's easier when you talk of yourself,
like screaming in an empty room
a mirror as your only company. Now you'll cry,
probably drink, drink up, gin or shit or absinthe glowing green
the green fairy tarrying near your slumpen form.
Leave a charred print on the wall--i was here,
it seems to say, i was here, till i burned,
let my ashes fall where they may; a trite reminder
that once you stood where the road forked twice
and you feared where they led you, and chose not to walk on at all.
Last edited by Dresden; 03-21-2011 at 08:17 PM.
(03-21-2011, 08:24 PM)
Do haikus count?
If so I'd like to submit one I wrote yesterday as I did math out by the pool. It's addressing how hard school makes it for me to educate myself in nature. I curse the outdoors.
I call it Melanoma
Homework in the sun
Farmer's tan for everyone!
Too bad, no wifi
Last edited by The Lamp; 03-21-2011 at 08:28 PM.
(03-29-2011, 11:01 PM)
My mind - doesn't work the way it should.
Not that there's anything wrong with that.
My life - didn't go the way it could,
but there's nothing left to do about that.
There are many beautiful things out there in the world.
Not a one of them means a single thing to me.
Where you see flowers and meadows of green,
all I see is fire and bloodied concrete.
You say I'm lying, it can't be that bad.
I'm just telling you the way it can be.
(04-02-2011, 03:38 AM)
In the ink deep blackness of night-time's embrace. #11
Lofted upward toward the heavens
on wings of brimstone flame.
Piercing the sky to soar
above the azure waves, clouded
by opalescent billows of fog
that weave in excursive patterns,
as beautiful from above as below.
Mountainous spires of aeon old rock
extend their stony grasp upwards.
High and away from the swathes of land,
verdant, and wild, and desolate
spreading forth into the distance
Unimaginably vast and grand,
viewed from this celestial path.
In the distance dark shadows creep,
scything forth in a perfect arc.
Swaddling the land in darkness,
pinpricked by electric points of light.
Shining patterns of humanity,
marking their existence
In the ink deep blackness of night-time's embrace.
(04-02-2011, 12:00 PM)
You broke my car window, thief,
And I just slept on passing by,
but what is your future drug addict?
I slept soundly, whilst a noose hangs round
I'll wake up and fix my car,
whilst the child you bore,
A rush of blood
takes you closer
The sound mind,
the bleeding heart,
the search for
cold white milk.
you walk alone,
dark unpoliced streets;
the sun will rise soon,
and off to bed you
Last edited by Ashes1396; 04-02-2011 at 03:29 PM.
(04-02-2011, 12:15 PM)
A Virgin Afternoon in the Arabian Desert
Have you ever crossed
A crestfallen street
Of an Autumn morning
Or paddled along
The bank of your summer youth
Wearing nothing but your smile
And a bathing suit
There is a world out there
That you and I share
But that canvass is painted strikingly
Against our fears
Spread your arms and take us in
Say the sons of cancer
To the the father of dilapidated walls;
Respond the walls:
With ice cold silence
A niche, a noose, a push, a tug
We sing no more
We hang so still
Last edited by Salvor.Hardin; 04-02-2011 at 02:13 PM.
(04-02-2011, 03:05 PM)
I think that's a lock.
Here is your selection this week:
Dresden - untitled
The Lamp - Melanoma
Irish - The view
Bootaaay - In the ink deep blackness of night-time's embrace.
Ashes1396 - thief
Salvor.Hardin - A Virgin Afternoon in the Arabian Desert
Get your votes in by the end of the weekend, Midnight PST.
Last edited by Ashes1396; 04-02-2011 at 03:30 PM.
(04-04-2011, 02:45 PM)
So, are we going to go ahead and call it?
1st Place - Salvor.Hardin - A Virgin Afternoon in the Arabian Desert
2nd Place - Dresden - untitled
3rd Place - Irish - The View
Salvor.Hardin 10 (2)
Dresden 8 (1)
Irish 6 (1)
Bootaaay 5 (1)
(_) = # of first place votes.