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NeoGAF Creative Writing Challenge #43 - "In The Dark"

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bengraven

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Theme - "In The Dark"

Word Limit: 1999

Submission Deadline: Wednesday, 1/27 by 11:59 PM Pacific.

Voting begins Thursday, 1/28, and goes until Saturday, 1/30 at 11:59 PM Pacific.

Optional Secondary Objective: Write a narrative poem. Maybe an epic poem ala "Beowulf", a satirical poem such as Alexander Pope made famous, or possibly a villanelle like ZephyrFate. ;) See here for styles.

Submission Guidelines:

- One entry per poster.
- All submissions must be written during the time of the challenge.
- Using the topic as the title of your piece is discouraged.
- Keep to the word count!

Voting Guidelines:

- Three votes per voter. Please denote in your voting your 1st (3 pts), 2nd (2 pts), and 3rd (1 pt) place votes.
- Please read all submissions before voting.
- YOU MUST VOTE in order to be eligible to win the challenge.
- When voting ends, the winner gets a collective pat on the back, and starts the new challenge.

Writing Challenge FAQ
 

Cyan

Banned
Right on.

Something screwy about those dates, though. If we're following the usual pattern, should be Wednesday, 1/27 for the submission deadline, and then voting until Saturday, 1/30.
 

Irish

Member
Yes! This theme can be interpreted in so many different ways. Hopefully I can come up with something that isn't ludicrously boring.

(I've noticed that I'm more likely to submit something when I post in the thread a ton beforehand.)
 
If you make the secondary objective to be "write in villanelle style", I'll have your babies.

Cyan: I'm currently doing a runthrough of semi-obscure poetry forms, myself, cataloguing the rise and fall of a gay couple over time. They met in college, had a disastrous falling out, then found each other later on, to re-ignite the flame.

I've written a sonnet, sestina, villanelle, rondeau, and pantoum so far. Considering the "Rondeau complex" form, which looks tough as hell.

And yeah, sestinas are a fuck and a half.
 

bengraven

Member
Cyan said:
Right on.

Something screwy about those dates, though. If we're following the usual pattern, should be Wednesday, 1/27 for the submission deadline, and then voting until Saturday, 1/30.

Changing it now. I was rushing to write up this post and did my math screwy.

ZephyrFate said:
If you make the secondary objective to be "write in villanelle style", I'll have your babies.

Cyan: I'm currently doing a runthrough of semi-obscure poetry forms, myself, cataloguing the rise and fall of a gay couple over time. They met in college, had a disastrous falling out, then found each other later on, to re-ignite the flame.

I've written a sonnet, sestina, villanelle, rondeau, and pantoum so far. Considering the "Rondeau complex" form, which looks tough as hell.

And yeah, sestinas are a fuck and a half.

I was actually going to make it "write a poem" for you. :D
 

Ashes

Banned
funny how I was thinking that I wouldn't carry on from the last piece, as new readers would probably not be able to follow the plot. Sometimes I finish stories in my own head for my own amusement... but the theme is one that lends too much to the plot I had in mind that I may just carry it on. Lets see how it turns out. Good luck everyone.
 

bengraven

Member
Irish said:
Yes! This theme can be interpreted in so many different ways. Hopefully I can come up with something that isn't ludicrously boring.

(I've noticed that I'm more likely to submit something when I post in the thread a ton beforehand.)

That's what I was going for. All my other ideas just didn't lend themselves to anything more than simple stories, but this idea and my own story idea came to mind immediately.

My story will be a nod to Ray Bradbury. :D

Ashes1396 said:
funny how I was thinking that I wouldn't carry on from the last piece, as new readers would probably not be able to follow the plot. Sometimes I finish stories in my own head for my own amusement... but the theme is one that lends too much to the plot I had in mind that I may just carry it on. Lets see how it turns out. Good luck everyone.

I don't see anything wrong with putting something similar to "previously on...Ashes" and post your story in the quote box. :D
 

Ashes

Banned
oh god, poems... personally, I find any level of poetry incredibly difficult to write.

edit: @bengraven: cool...

I have an old poem, which I obviously can't enter that fits both. Wrote it way back in my school days. Teacher tore it shreds and put me off poetry for a long time.... I'll try and find it and make it clear that I'm not entering it in for the contest..
 

Cyan

Banned
Irish said:
I've noticed that I'm more likely to submit something when I post in the thread a ton beforehand.)
Better get posting, then!

ZephyrFate said:
If you make the secondary objective to be "write in villanelle style", I'll have your babies.

Cyan: I'm currently doing a runthrough of semi-obscure poetry forms, myself, cataloguing the rise and fall of a gay couple over time. They met in college, had a disastrous falling out, then found each other later on, to re-ignite the flame.

I've written a sonnet, sestina, villanelle, rondeau, and pantoum so far. Considering the "Rondeau complex" form, which looks tough as hell.

And yeah, sestinas are a fuck and a half.
Damn. My man, you are a glutton for punishment.

It is fun to play around with some of those strict forms, though. Where it's a challenge to finish it at all, let alone make it good.

Ashes1396 said:
funny how I was thinking that I wouldn't carry on from the last piece, as new readers would probably not be able to follow the plot. Sometimes I finish stories in my own head for my own amusement... but the theme is one that lends too much to the plot I had in mind that I may just carry it on. Lets see how it turns out. Good luck everyone.
With a little effort, you could probably make a continuation that was basically stand-alone.
 
Cyan said:
Better get posting, then!


Damn. My man, you are a glutton for punishment.

It is fun to play around with some of those strict forms, though. Where it's a challenge to finish it at all, let alone make it good.


With a little effort, you could probably make a continuation that was basically stand-alone.
I've written some god damn gems recently, especially with the villanelle, the rondeau, and now the garland cinquain I just wrote.

It's definitely so much fun to write with restrictions. The one thing I will never do / never be able to do is write with a meter, like an iamb or some shit. No way.
 
Penance
Word Count: 203

I wander endlessly through these fields of tears
The sky grave and grim and the flowers black and blue, silent seers
Like a lost soul, trying to find penance that is overdue.

The moon breaks through and its light cannot renew
Only adds soft flushes like paintstrokes; it mocks and cheers
I wander endlessly through these fields of tears

Brevity is the name of this board game, no longevity to imbue
For this mortality is going to end soon, and all that karma disappears
Like a lost soul, trying to find penance that is overdue.

And all the pain that I long to misconstrue
Just so I can lay in blissful ignorance, even if it's a bed of spears
I wander endlessly through these fields of tears

There are no more rules, no more feral dogs that chew
For this path is mine alone, a dark tattoo, it adheres
Like a lost soul, trying to find penance that is overdue.

Forgiveness is all one can hope for, so drink down the frothy brew
And wash down your sins with ignorance, for it alone perseveres
I wander endlessly through these fields of tears
Like a lost soul, trying to find penance that is overdue.
 

ronito

Member
Zazou, what you're gonna do?
There's a lot of people coming for you
Zazou, comment allez-vous?
A knock on the door in the night

That Zazou, he don't care
Dark glasses, long hair
Takes his time, sneers at men
Some ugly people want revenge

Zazou, comment allez-vous?
A knock on the door in the night (In the night)

In the night (In the night)

That Zazou, he sleeps all day
Then down to Select or Le Collisee
Sips his drinks, orders more
Says what he thinks and it's a crazy war

Zazou, what you're gonna do?
A knock on the door in the night
(In the night In the night ...)

Zazou, comment allez-vous?
A knock on the door in the night (the night the night)

And when the soldiers strut, all he cares about
Is love
When the flags are out, all he cares about
Is love
Well, there's a thin line between love and crime
And in this situation
A thin line between love and crime and -
Collaboration (-ration)

In the night
(In the night In the night In the night In the night ...)

(Crime Crime Crime Crime Crime Crime Crime Crime Crime Crime
Crime Crime Crime Crime Crime Crime Crime Crime Crime Crime
Crime Crime Crime Crime ...)

In the night (In the night In the night)

In the night (In the night In the night)

Zazou, what you're gonna do?
There's a lot of people coming for you
Zazou, comment allez-vous?
A knock on the door in the night

Now everybody's under somebody's spell
Unless they've already gone to hell
In the streets you can hear the people say
That, Zazou, he should be locked away!

When the soldiers strut, all he cares about
Is love
Oh, when the flags are out, all he cares about
Is love
And there's a thin line between love and crime
And in this situation
A thin line between love and crime and
Collaboration
 

Irish

Member
Posting helps me finish what I'm working on, so I figured I'd go ahead and share the story about my relationship with these challenges:

Before I joined, I'd see a challenge every once in a while and read through every entry. I was thoroughly amazed by the level of skill most of you guys presented. So, by the time challenge #33 went up, I decided I was going to write something up and enter it.

I ended up entering a story about a flood and a son who goes to rescue his mother during the middle of it. I got quite a few supportive comments, so I figured I'd fix my mistakes and come back with an even better story in the next round. My next story came out decently enough, but I still screwed up some pretty important stuff. In comparison to my first story, this one turned out to be rather complex and significantly changed up the tone. (something that would frame the rest of my entries.)

That tone thing is the main thing that grabbed my attention as I was reading through the rest of my entries. I somehow came to the conclusion that everything had to be "realistic", however, I must have interpreted that to mean "dark and gritty". So it seems like my stories got darker and crazier as time went on.

Hell, I even started this challenge out in that same mindset, quickly scribbling up a couple of ideas that were "dark". Here's a little ditty about a hitman and a paragraph that was inspired by it.

Picture of a dead girl,
encased in a locket.
Dig a little grave,
for the junk in my pocket.

I have nowhere,
to confess my sins.
Dig a little hole,
to bury them in.

Chained to her family,
the mother turns sour.
That's when I'm called in,
hitman of the hour.

Another innocent man,
imprisoned for life.
All part of the plan,
of the malevolent wife.

Heart's turned black,
from the deeds I've done.
Never any shade,
from the noonday sun.

This gravesite,
is our little secret.
Put a bullet in your head,
to make sure you keep it.

Mound of dirt,
standing tall.
Not nearly enough,
to cover it all...

Corn silk. That's what her hair looked like. Frizzy, pale strands grew out of her head like it was the end of a cob. The green rug rolled around her lifeless body completed the rogue illusion. I only wish it were the bright, vibrant green of life instead of the color of the filth I spew out of my mouth every other night. In about ten more years, she would have looked like a seraph in her emerald prom gown. A loss of innocence would have occurred that night, so, in some perverse way, I've preserved that. Then again, I'm pretty sure that Mommy Dearest didn't have that in mind when she hired me to take care of her "excess baggage".

Well, I think this is the challenge that marks a change in that tone. In fact, I think I'm heading in a Scribble-ish direction. Trust me though, it won't be any where near as cool as Scribble's previous entries.
 

Irish

Member
Red Orange Yellow Green Blue Indigo Violet
Building blocks of the visual world
All were once part of my daily life, but are now rare occurrences
I could once see, but I can see no longer
Everything is not white, so it can't be psychological
Everything is not black, so it can't be physical
Mostly, everything is clear
I see through it all, but I know that it's there
I was not born blind, but so I am now

Birds Chirping, Bodies Breathing, Hearts Beating, Sirens Blaring, Houses Twitching
Building blocks of the aural world
Once these sounds were recurrent, but are now scarce
I could once hear, but I can hear no longer
There is no white noise
There is no silence
There is only clarity
Noises are constant, yet they no longer exist
I was not born deaf, but so I am now

Sweet, Salty, Sour, Bitter, Piquant, Savory
Building blocks of the gastronomic world
Flavors once danced across my tongue, but are now scant
I could once taste, but I can taste no longer
I am not assaulted by an overabundance of flavor
However, there isn't an absence of it
Food and drink are tasteless, yet are zesty
I was not born aguesic, but so I am now

Fragrant, Aromatic, Rank, Mildewy
Building blocks of the olfactory world
Long ago, scents were abundant, but are now uncommon
I could once smell, but I can smell no longer
Aromas and stenches mix freely
Yet they have all disappeared
I know not whether odor is or is not
I was not born anosmic, but so I am now

I CAN FEEL!
Textures, Forces, Temperatures
I CAN FEEL THEM ALL!
They are the only things that are a constant for me
Wind blows across my skin, chilling me to the bone
Bodies gather round, boiling my blood
IT ALL FEELS SO GOOD!
Pleasure, Pain
it doesn't matter much to me
All is better than nothing

Memories are mixed
Nothing seems right anymore
Myth and imagination seem to have taken their place
A dog with violet bark as fur screeches as if it were an eagle
People from my past speak with dead languages I have never heard
Apples taste like cheese and smell like excrement

I hate this place
Take me home
JUST LEAVE ME ALONE!

_______________________________________________________________________-------------


Well, this marks my return. I think I've retained my style unintentionally. Decent first half, awful end.
 

Cyan

Banned
Messypandas said:
Man i wish i had microsoft word :(. be nice to do one of these things
What do you need Word for? I do most of mine in Notepad. Or hell, sign up for Google Docs and use their free Word clone.
 

Aaron

Member
Cyan said:
What do you need Word for? I do most of mine in Notepad. Or hell, sign up for Google Docs and use their free Word clone.
Or use Open Office, or Wordpad, or other word clones.
 

kid ness

Member
Ok! Here is my entry.
It's titled "Typewriter".
Word Count: 140

one time i was important
i used to run the show
fingers touched me and i produced what they wanted
but now i sit lonely, cold, and unwanted

because my service is retired
my ink is probably expired
i am looked over because i am not technologically sufficient
but i am still capable and not grossly inefficient

i could be a table for your cheap chinese take out
i am infatuated by the texture of the paper bag
it reminds me of when i use to plunk ink onto a similar surface

i could be used as a footrest
my leather case will provide ease to your legs
after a tiring long day at work
kick back and let me hold your enormous calves

but i will not be content
as an attic companion to your photo albums
 

Aaron

Member
On the Moons of Kadath
word count: 587

Space!
Ancient light from long dead stars,
beckons we bold humans from afar.
Though the engines made from the cleverest of men
could not be guided by a machine's cold hand.
So we are the daring crew of the USS Arkham,
and here I am the vessel's chaotic muse,
plotting paths through hyperspace
by virtue of a synth-violin played in tune.

Discovery!
The days do pass half in cold sleep,
flitting across the cosmos for some sign of life.
The trip is long and tensions strain,
so gladdened we are by the sight
of a blue green orb.
The captain speaks of colonization,
but Doctor Carter is drawn to a moon,
where monitors display an alien stone city.
Brave Doctor Carter and his small team!
They set their shuttle to this cold moon,
and we remain wait to hear of wonders.

Silence.
The quiet hours pray upon our nerves,
with every effort to contact them a failure.
Many wonder what mishap could have befallen them,
but after a day cycle passes another shuttle is sent,
bearing hardy soldiers prepared for the worst.
We that remain are glued to the viewscreen,
watching their slow journey from afar.

Interference!
The signal crackles and sputters,
as they locate the abandoned shuttle.
There are signs of a struggle in the dust,
but between the missing team it seems.
The alien city of narrow pyramids lies ahead,
and there they go as the signal weakens.
No sight! Only the words of the security chief,
speaking of strange runes with a faint silver glow.
The body of man torn apart barely rates a mention,
for the runes are getting clearer as they venture.
Though just as they begin to understand,
another voice intrudes.

The growl of a beast
is the final sound we hear
The signal is lost.

Uncertainty.
Our captain requests orders from command,
knowing how long it will take to get a reply.
We wait floating among the dark of space,
until we notice a shuttle returning.
All attempts to hail are met with silence.
The captain orders the bay doors shut,
and we're given arms against this unknown.

Crash!
The shuttle collides with the thick hull,
alarms blare their warnings of decompression.
Men in spacesuits must make repairs
if we're to survive an hour more.
Power is reduced to running lights,
air is thinned to emergency levels.
A cold creeps into our bulky spacesuits,
cut off from the rest of the cosmos.
We listen to the sounds of repairs,
the men reassuring us the damage is minor.
The shuttle was obliterated,
but something has survived.

Music.
I begin to play the synth-violin,
even under the strain of bulky gloves.
The song is strange and unfamiliar,
but my hands move without thought.
The captain orders me stop,
but I can not abide.
The repair crew has gone silent,
and something is moving closer.
The captain reaches out in a rage,
but without me we are truly stranded.
So he gathers up the rest of the crew,
and they head out to finish the repairs,
while I am left to play alone.

Weary.
Music flows even as my eyes shut.
The captain is shouting over the comm,
his sounds drowned in unfamiliar strains.
These notes are terrible and alien,
but I can't stop my fingers now.
Relief comes as the captain falls silent,
and I begin to hear an answer to my song.
It's drawing ever closer to me now.

I play forever,
among those stone pyramids,
lit by long dead stars.
 

Aaron

Member
Cyan said:
Hey, blank verse! Nice.

I'm doing something kind of similar for my piece. I hope.
It was inspired by the word limit.

Yeah, I'd say don't worry about the rhyming. Just make sure to get something done. Lot less stressful that way.
 

starsky

Member
She was a doe, a hapless deer, with her wide eyes and her swollen lower lip. She wiped her face exhaustedly. She looked at me and that was when I knew. It was the last day on Earth. Her eyes said so.

“It’s funny.”

“What is? You missed a mark. Near the end of your brow, yes, there.”

Sally smiled. “Thanks. Zombies in Los Angeles. It’s funny.”

“Celebrity undeads, you mean? Yeah, I guess. I saw Zombie Terminator the other day. He was shuffling around near the big mall.”

“Hahah. Arnie! He makes a great zombie.”

I had to agree. “Better than Lifeless Lohan. She … Wait, actually, she looks as lost as she did when she was alive.”

Sally laughed. I checked my watch. It was soon going to be dark. We both knew what that meant. They were different at night, somehow. Subconsciously. And my legs were broken, and Sally’s stomach, punctured. But that was later. Now was chill time. Cigarette between old friends who were once lovers who were once kids from the same street.

“What do you think they will do when everyone’s a zombie? When there are no more humans to scare and eat?” I asked.

“I donno. I mean, they don’t seem to be that bright, but … who knows, given time?”

“Maybe they are just going to eat each other… Nom Nom Nom.”

She considered this. “I don’t think so. I think they only like living flesh. Their own not as tasty. But yeah, who knows, maybe when there’s nothing else.”

I checked the window to my left. A few zombies ambled along. One used to be Johnny Depp. He looked very cool even in undead form. A little uncaring, a little high, and a little sophisticated sexy in his American-turn-European way. I chuckled.

“Look it’s Zombie Captain Sparrow.”

Sally craned her head and giggled. “He should have been in costume. That’d be awesome.”

We watched the undead milling about for awhile.

“Maybe they will build a zombie village. And organize a mill-around.”

“Clockwise on weekdays, counter-clockwise on weekends?”

She laughed.

“Yeah.”

The sun set and we looked at each other. I checked the chamber of the gun. There were only two bullets left.

“Thanks for doing this, Keith.”

I did not have anything to say to that. I think that was my cue to kiss her. But there was no time. The horde of ever-hungry things found our scents and started to smash themselves through our barricade. They tripped and stumbled in the dark, and made their clumsy ways to the bedroom. Somehow, one of them set off the old stereo and it blared a song through out the house. “-And AAAAAAAAaaaaIiiiiiaaaaaaaayyyyy willl allwaaays LOOooOOOooooveeee yyyewwwwwwww-OOoooOOOOohhhh. I, I will all-ways looOOOoOOOOOOOOve. Yooooouuu-oooooooh.”

I took aim at the most beautiful face and blew her head off.

And then mine.
 

bengraven

Member
I think Aaron is stalking me. Seriously.

I was just reading some Clark Ashton Smith and was thinking of doing a Lovecraftian poem and he went there.

One day left everyone! This week has been insane, I may have to re-write mine as prose or half poem to finish in time!
 

Cyan

Banned
Oh man, haven't done blank verse in a long time. This is... more difficult than I expected.

I'll get it done, but I doubt the whole thing will scan.
 

AnkitT

Member
The message was lost like the cause
Pause, re-read the clause that got out the claws
At a loss for words as an absurd herd occurred
A fine bird he remembered lay dismembered
On that late lonely December; sunset glow of ember
The dark spread fast, though in his mind lasted the glow
Behold and lo, the realization was too slow
Reproduced effects by generating birth defects
And doing blow like the next John Doe

But no, there was another plan, brotherman
A flicker of lingering hope in a southern land
Where the business of supply and demand
Was held with a rather heavy hand
To them, this was better than no plan
So they headed down relying on instinct
And followed the dimly lit precincts distinct
As they were held by a common group-think
No difference before or after a blink

A see-saw event dead bent on the intent
Ends defined the means as they were all spent
A dead end, Godsend as the blind led the blind
The destination was all looted and mined
Some of them stayed behind who were so inclined
As the night became day and sleep became an escape
The red cape, colour of grapes and basic shapes
The aim was to remember what was
Instead of the cause of the loss
Complacency was the norm as was always
Memories passed on to next of kin as they all gaze
The concept of sin was yet to be seen as nobody was keen
But when it came to the scene all was serene
So policy changed to fallacy
But it was known, a time when all could ‘see’
It took a concerted effort to avoid pitfall
A memory in the well lit slit crawled
__________________________________________________

My first time! :) I went the more literal route as i'm not familiar with all the different syles of poetry yet, hope its fine.
 

bengraven

Member
Sadly, I won't be able to finish either. I had planned on finishing and editing the story after tonight, but I work 2-11 EST, thus I'm still at work and I'm getting my ass kicked.

That said, good luck, everyone's story are awesome - I think this is the first challenge I've read where every entry is gold.

Remember, 12am PST!
 

Ashes

Banned
Feel free to read the first part from the last writing challenge. I've included a recap just in case.



Word count: 1934 (including recap)

Recap

Aliens invaded Earth on the 13th of January. The first bomb was dropped over City L at 8:25 am. A man (code named: K), a school girl (Bella), and a college student (Joel) had escaped in a vehicle of alien origin. Come nightfall, or upon moonset, whichever you prefer, they had decided to return to the city centre. This was in the hope that UNA soldiers would have recaptured the centre and/or put their base there.

23 minutes later, they ran for their lives.

“Just thank the god you believe in that a podgy alien is doing the chasing,” K said humourlessly. Whilst under the shore a heart neared asunder, a reflexive wince and a limp could not keep secret the cramp in his calves. Beside him, Bella ran breathlessly red-faced in her school shoes. Her feet recoiled with pain every time she made contact with Main Street.
“You are going to think this very inappropriate,” Joel said in between his breaths. “But running for our lives is kind of fun...”
K grimaced. He found no amusement running under moonlight through bombed out streets, atop human carcases and through the smell of napalm in the air. His ears attested the ongoing bombing of al paradiso. The war witness shed a tear. In one instance, he loathed himself for parking a mile away, and in another he put his head down and made a mental note to address the importance of escape plans from here on in. K slowed to a walk and looked back at the persistent bastard. He then stopped... bent down and rested his hands on his knees; this being the universal gesture of a man tired after a sprint and/or perhaps a man who has given up...
Bella came back to K. “What’re you doing...? You can outrun an obese alien for gawd’s sakes...”
“Duck...” K whispered.
“What?”
“Duck!”
K lifted up the metallic pole he had stopped in front of and swung like a baseball player over Bella and smack into the alien’s jaw. K kicked the beast whilst bearing his chest. He vented his frustration with an unintelligible lion-like roar.
A fiddler bathed in moonlight on a roof nearby stopped playing to his wife. The fiddler smiled wryly then resumed with his wife on the piano.
K sent Joel on a sprint to fetch their ‘car’. Bella took the helmet off the soldier and wore the oversized thing herself. The two walked fifty yards when they heard a roar behind them. The obese monstrosity ran -on all fours now- like a bear. K and Bella ran as fast as their hearts, bodies and minds would carry them. It was no use, K realized. This time it would catch up with parking space for a bus to spare.
There was a fork in the road ahead. Left led to the alien spaceship. K tore off his shirt and tied it to the pole/bat. He took out a lighter and lit the shirt on fire. With so much napalm in the air, it lit like a flag. K ran down the right path of the fork; he was sure the ‘bear’ would chase the light.
“Stay left Bella,” K said. “And run fast.”
Some way into street, K ran alone with the burning flag. He looked over his shoulder before he stopped. Adrenaline shot through to his eyeballs and his heart rate hit 180 bpm. His limp was cast aside as he ran full tilt.
The flag had lit up the entire street and shown the ‘bear’ the child veering left. The beast surmised that it was more likely to catch the child and also use it against the adult male. It relaxed to its initial bipedal motion.
K turned a sharp left back onto Main Street. He felt light, agile and fast with noradrenalin pumped into his muscles. He was chasing the ‘bear’ who was chasing the girl.
I’m supposed to be running away from you, why am I now chasing you...
All hope left him once K saw the double-decker bus lain on its side blocking off the junction. Their vehicle had been parked behind the bus. Joel kept it helplessly floating above the bus. Bella jumped onto the bonnet of the car in front of the bus... everything slowed down; K watched the ‘podgy obese bear’ like alien reach for the child. On instinct K did the only thing he could do. He threw the pole with the burning shirt at the bear....
The torch spun through the darkness steadfast upon its designated route. Its victim uttered an almighty roar; it fully expressed pain, pain, and more pain.
K grabbed the school girl with the soldier’s helmet on, lifted her onto the top of the bus and then safely on to the ship. Only when they had gotten onto the ship did K let go and fall away into the corner.
Through the open hatchway, Bella looked at the burning figure of the shadow that had so ardently chased them. She then looked at the crumbling figure in the corner. Joel in the pilot seat also looked at the beast roasting like it was on hellfire. On the rear view mirror, he saw the inconsolable thirty year old figure in the corner...
K shed tears like the Indian monsoon shed rainfall.... he tried desperately to think of a prayer... any prayer... he could not comprehend the events that would have followed had the ‘bear’ been able to reach the child.... he trembled with fear.... flashes of a lost loved one filtered through uncontrollably as if it were poking him with a stick.
…
The bombing continued sporadically through the night. K leant back on the –yet as unnamed- space cruiser on the 139th floor of Building A Plus. The building's foundation columns stood firm but the walls on all four sides of the 139th floor had crumbled away. The air system pumped in excessive oxygen to counter the altitude problems. The ceiling lights still functioned here and there. On the horizon K saw the sun rising above the ocean. Thunder crackled, lightening struck and rain fell on most parts of the city. Most of the city was still shrouded in darkness as he sipped tea from a company branded mug.
Joel sat on the floor edge as he marked/updated a tourist map. He didn't need the binoculars he had found to see on the going obliteration of City L. The Alien air force was on an airship two miles to the south of the city and their ground troops had camped a mile west of this position. Joel saw thirty vehicles make their way along the A13 highway into the city. Pockets of resistance were littered throughout City L. A rebellious school here and a –defend to the death- hospital over there. UNA soldiers were camped on the outskirts of the city, near the beach.
Bella wrote her diary on the back of scrap office paper/letters. With great effort she attempted to jot down the thoughts traversing her mind. Holding a pen is hard, she wrote, not because I’m afraid or feel numb, which are both true, but because my hands are blackened, bruised and ripped in places...its K I feel sorry for... I don't know his story but I’d like to... He is tall, but slender and weak framed... well happy thirteenth birthday to you... oh you forgot did you, so did I...so did I... :(
K looked through his binoculars and bit into a day old sandwich. There was a buzz in the air like a jet approaching. K closed his eyes. The sound appeared to be omnidirectional. He opened his eyes. From the east, a UNA Jet hounded by three smaller sleeker alien spaceships were coming in his direction...
...
The Lf53 fighter jet had Building A plus in its sight. The pilot had her finger on the red eject seat button. She hoped the PR material from the Tower’s launch was more than a boast. With shaky fingers she zoomed onto the building. She saw a man drinking tea with sandwiches. “Good God man. Get the fuck out of the building!”
…
“Joel, Bella get in the vehicle,” K said calmly.
“And what’re you going to do?” Joel asked.
“I’m determined to finish my tea!” K replied raising his mug. That’s it K... you can do this... just be calm about it all...
K drank tea before he took another bite out of his sandwich. Alarming emergency red lights came on as the building mainframe computer automatically switched on. The ground shook. Shutters came down on all four sides. K’s heart took on a life of it’s own when the Glass walls came down behind it.
“Warning! Unidentified Flying Object’s crash absorbed on thirty third and thirty second floor. Please brace for emergency shock absorbers in five seconds. In the event of computer failure please remain calm. Lifts will remain operational. Please do not use lifts. Warning! Emergency services call has resulted in failure. Warning! Secondary Crash absorbed on thirty ninth floor. Emergency shock absorbers are engaged for level seven magnitude! Warning! Thirty third floor has weakened by twenty three percent. Code three point four will activate in fifteen seconds... ”
The building’s emergency sirens then came on. A second set of shutters came down to cover all four sides. The staircases had already caved in. The shutters were blocking the only way out. K took an axe off the wall and put it in the ship. He then shut the door and settled in the co- pilot seat.
“Warning! Prepare for controlled disintegration of floors. No human life detected on floor thirty. Floor disintegrate in three seconds. Human life detected on floor thirty one. Floor thirty two. Floor thirty three. Floor thirty four. Floor thirty five. Controlled disintegration successfully carried out where possible. Warning! Building is still unstable. Foundation three will begin scaling Building A plus in five seconds.”
K got out of the vehicle with axe in hand. He drove at the bottom left corner of the eastern shutters to no avail. After two more strikes he resigned to the fact presented to him: they were trapped. He shouted to within his lung’s limit. He struck the gate with the blunt axe. He looked at the western gate. It suggested no escape route. There was also something wrong with the air system. Air was being sucked out of the room.
“Warning! Oxygen control software malfunctioning. Leakage detected on the 139th floor. Oxygen level dropping. Human life detected. Please evacuate premises immediately. Warning!”
After a minute, K felt the effects of asphyxia which lead him to drop to the floor.
“Get to the lift...” K said in the final throes of consciousness. K saw one of the kids make a dash for the lift... Enveloped in darkness, he could hear the ‘whish’ of the sprinklers being turned on to douse a fire a hundred floors below...
Thank you god, he thought, resigned to his darkened fate...
He then heard the ding of a lift door opening.
“Come on buddy... ‘Joel said smilingly as he dragged K’s body into the lift. “Come into the light...”
When K awoke he found himself inside a lift. The children were merrily playing cards.
“Where to next captain?” Joel asked.
K turned over on his back, inhaled a lungful of air and stared at the ceiling. “Downstairs...Pilot’s alive... I think… we need to help her.”
K breathed in…. and he breathed out… there was life enough in him to care to live yet. He realized that now…

Fin
 

DumbNameD

Member
Questionable (2 or so Words)

You never did
take care of the ants along the window sill.
They bob in an incessant stream,
like spilled black pills.
It must be treacherous to traipse
across the faucet-top swamps,
where a simple stagger could shrivel
spindly legs to a shallow grave.
How could you squash them?
They are their pheromones,
and to have a sweet smell intoxicate them,
charmed and befuddled,
like a north and south attraction,
what else could they do?
Sugar crumbs meet them at the countertop.
That's where she used to make coffee,
in the morn, with her bleary eyes.

You always hid
your hands in your jacket pockets.
That old thing. Where at the seams,
the thread has come undone and dangle
like a string around your pointing finger,
reminding you of something.
They scurry like rats to their holes,
those shadow tunnels circulating inside.
They only peek for food.
She couldn't hold them.
That's what she used to tug on for a time,
for a touch, with her slender reaches.

You never figured
to have such a string of murderous nights.
Each night you cloned yourself.
After the day is drained and done,
you slip into that shaped pod,
fit to you like your jacket pocket.
You are face to face,
looking at yourself forming
in the black slurry of delta stars.
But before you can even wake,
before you can warn and teach,
before the shoulds and have-tos,
you're upon your own hapless self
with your fingers clawed around your neck
down in that pod.
A struggle gives way to a gurgle,
and you wake as new as old.
That's where she used to be,
next to you, with her soothing hum.

In the dark,
the heart beats as it bears.
It floats in a cauldron of tar
that boils through the skin.
It coats you up,
as if drenched from an ocean swim.
For all the drips and strings
that gravity tugs on,
your frantic fingers twist and clutch,
and you pile it all into your chest.
Why do you hold on so tight
to this sludge that slips from you?
Do you think your fossil bones will crumble
without the tar to preserve you?
You should have reached for her mug
before it fell out of your slick hands
and broke into pieces.
That's why you're sinking into this pocket,
full of crumbs, with ants all around.
 

Cyan

Banned
Hart Hall (1338)

The_Geat was unimpressed, though not surprised
at the wretched remnants of once-proud Hart Hall--
for 0utsid3r had left it shattered, dark.

The site now stood deserted and forlorn,
the Rothkos having fled for safer ground,
far from the wilds of the Wider Overnet.

All kinds of patrons--hackers, cowboys, jockeys,
rich young dabblers and their hangers-on--
had once stopped by the Hall, making it
a meeting place, a jump-off point for the Wider
Overnet. The Hall had once been great.
And now its site stood empty, lost, forgot.

Where once had stood the showy avatars
of powerful men, now all was starless night.
Not the pregnant, gloaming darkness of
a site still being built, with structure set:
the utter final dark of empty space.

The_Geat moved down the width and breadth of the Hall.
His avatar was strong and fully stocked
with the latest battle progs: scanners, crackers,
crashers, breakers, jammers, static blasts.
He didn't know just yet which ones he'd need.

And so he'd brought them all.

He slung a simple
pattern recognition prog from hand
to digital hand. A twelve-year-old could spot
the pattern; never mind a hacking pro.
But still the solid, unreal weight of the
first prog he'd ever written eased his mind.

The_Geat as yet knew little of his prey.
The Rothko family told one what they thought
one had to know--and that was all. But what
he knew of 0utsid3r was bad enough.

The Rothkos headed up a multinational.
They had the best security, the best
in defense, shielding programs, and in ICE.
And all those countermeasures hadn't helped.

If he should fall today, if 0utsid3r
should beat him back, he wouldn't be the first;
how many men had Rothko sent that day,
only to see them fall to 0utsid3r?

And where had 0utsid3r come from? The_Geat
had never heard his name before the Rothkos
came to call. Skillful hackers didn't
come from out of nowhere. Skill could not
be bought, but only earned, and skill so earned
would leave a trail--the sort The_Geat could follow.
This 0utsid3r had left no trace or trail.

The_Geat gazed out from the Hall. That omnipresent,
endless darkness was disheartening, true.
But he was still The_Geat, the greatest hacker
in all of Western Europe--and so the world.
The_Geat had hacked the Vatican, the Tsar,
the Caliphate, the Secretary General.
He'd hit that monument to paranoia,
the Pentagon. Yet even he, The_Geat,
would have stopped short of a frontal assault on the Hall.

The_Geat gazed out from the Hall. Something gazed back.

The darkness pooled and coalesced around
a bright and fiery pair of silver eyes.

The_Geat just stared.

0utsid3r had come.

The_Geat looked up at 0utsid3r and saw
no avatar, but only glowing eyes.
No overt armor progs, no weapons sheathed--
or none The_Geat could see at any rate.
What could that mean? Surely 0utsid3r
would not patrol the Hall unarmed. But if he
could hide his battle progs, he must have great
control--and not of just the Hall, but the
underlying Overnet controls.
The_Geat had never heard of such a thing.

The_Geat himself fair glowed with battle progs--
his defense showed as sturdy, gleaming mail
adorned with the emblems of everyone he'd hacked.
A solid shield of bronze completed the set.
His arsenal of crashers, crackers, and
the like were represented as a vast
array of swords and knives and even spears--
an armory, and all at his command.

But in the face of those fierce, glowing eyes
The_Geat could feel a growing thread of fear.
The Hall was virtual but the stakes were not--
a hacker killed in the Overnet would die
as sure as if his body'd been shot in the head.

The_Geat stepped back, as 0utsid3r came in.
The eyes moved forward, and the darkness with them,
but as they did, The_Geat began to see--
there was an avatar inside that ink.
An avatar of pitch and ebony,
a mound of gloomy murk--not only eyes.

A cutter came at his face with blazing speed.
The_Geat ducked down behind his shield, but felt
the burning wake it left, singeing his hair.
His virtual heart pounded, but he was The_Geat.

"So 0utsid3r," he said, and raised the shield.
"Why come you here? And why drive all away?
What good can Hart Hall do if it lies fallow?"

There was no answer, just another prog.
A cracker, this, and closer than the last.

The_Geat stepped back a pace. "Just tell me, then,
what do you gain by an endless battle here?
You crushed Hart Hall, a great, impressive hack.
So why keep fighting for it--what's the point?"

A voice came then, a deep and grating voice,
a death rattle mingled with winter ice.
"LEAVE ME BE," said 0utsid3r, "IT'S MINE."

"What's yours?" began The_Geat, but stopped at once.
A massive bar of iron had appeared
from deeper darkness, aiming for his side.
The_Geat held up his shield, but as it rang
from monumental impact, it shivered
into bits.

The_Geat had owned that shield for years.
He looked again at 0utsid3r, and fear
burned in his stomach. He could not win this fight,
no, not like this. He had to move, to strike.

The_Geat stepped forward, towards the deeper dark.
He tossed a breaker, but the shadows moved,
folding in upon themselves so that
the breaker passed them by. The_Geat just blinked.
He pulled a crasher, swiped at 0utsid3r.
The shadows moved again, again the weapon
missed. A static blast found empty air,
the shadows flowing underneath its force.

The_Geat fell back again, and tried to raise
his shield, but it was gone. And now the bar
of iron whistled toward unguarded flesh.

Smash!
The_Geat flew across the Hall and hit a wall.
He lay there stunned, shadows moving closer.

The silver eyes drew near, surrounded still
by inky black. He was beaten, over, done.
He could not beat this enemy. None could.

No.

He was The_Geat.

He was The_Geat.

He pushed himself upward then, toward the dark.
The fiery silver eyes stopped moving, paused
as though confused by what was going on.
The darkness roiled around them, shadows gyred.

The_Geat stepped forward, drawing as he moved.
He swung the sword, the slicer, at the eyes.

The shadows folded, bent, and the eyes moved left.

The_Geat stepped to the right, encircling them.
Again he swung the slicer at the eyes.

The shadows folded, bent, and the eyes moved left.

The_Geat moved right again, a frown upon
his virtual face. And once again he swung.

The shadows folded, bent, and the eyes moved left.

So why would 0utsid3r repeat himself?
The_Geat moved right and swung, the eyes moved left.
It could not be coincidence. The_Geat
moved right, and then the eyes moved left, in never-
changing pattern. 0utsid3r could not
be toying with him, could he? Awful thought.
But no, it made no sense. Unless... unless
this 0utsid3r was not what he appeared.

And realization struck.

A childish demeanor, paired with power
in the Overnet. An awful strength
and skill, without the power to escape
a simple pattern of repeated moves.
This 0utsid3r was not what he appeared--
no hacker, he.

He was not even human.

Unless The_Geat had misread all the signs--
and he had not.

The_Geat stepped right, the eyes moved left, still circling.
And The_Geat knew what to do. From deep
within his armory he drew a prog.
A simple pattern recognition prog--
the first The_Geat had ever chanced to write.

The_Geat stepped forward, sliced toward the eyes.

And as the shadows folded, he threw the prog
just to the left of the eyes. The silver eyes
flowed into the pattern recognition prog.

A burst of static; light blazed through the Hall.
Aurorae pierced the shadows and the murk;
the silver eyes shuddered, crackled, closed.

A simple avatar, dressed all in black,
lay there upon the floor. It had no face,
no features to distinguish it at all--
just a pair of silver eyes, now closed.
 

Iceman

Member
Apologies.

I'm really upset that I couldn't get my entry finished on time. I was counting on having this evening free but then events at work sucked me in. I would like to stress the word suck in the previous sentence. I only just finished work two minutes ago. That's a fifteen and a half-hour day.

Well done to everyone who actually produced something. It takes a serious amount of effort. I'll have my votes in soon.
 

Cyan

Banned
This is going to be a tough one. I find it really difficult to critique poetry or verse... might just stick to voting.

Nice to see a bunch of entries again!

Iceman said:
I'm really upset that I couldn't get my entry finished on time. I was counting on having this evening free but then events at work sucked me in. I would like to stress the word suck in the previous sentence. I only just finished work two minutes ago. That's a fifteen and a half-hour day.
Damn, I'm sorry dude. Hope you're getting paid overtime.
 

bengraven

Member
Great great job everyone. Voting is going to be incredibly difficult. Sorry I haven't checked in since last night. I'm hoping it slows down a bit at work so I can finish reading the last few posts.

Iceman said:
Apologies.

I'm really upset that I couldn't get my entry finished on time. I was counting on having this evening free but then events at work sucked me in. I would like to stress the word suck in the previous sentence. I only just finished work two minutes ago. That's a fifteen and a half-hour day.

Well done to everyone who actually produced something. It takes a serious amount of effort. I'll have my votes in soon.

It's fine, we're both in the same boat. This is the second time I've created a challenge and not had a chance to participate and it's heartbreaking.

This is also why I can't finish writing my novel. :(

They need to get a wordpad app for Kindle so I can continue working during meetings or when I'm away from my PC. :(
 
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