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Oh, poop. I fell asleep without writing anything. Can I get an hour or so to whip something up, if that's cool?
Oh, poop. I fell asleep without writing anything. Can I get an hour or so to whip something up, if that's cool?
I can't open this. What's the password?
you can see it if you quote the post, in email tags.
Nezumi - Days Long Past: If theyre incorporeal ghosts and cant touch things... How do they move chess pieces? : )
Sweet, this already looks like a promising batch!
I wish I had known about this. I'm something of a writer myself, but it looks like I just missed the deadline. This would have been a great topic for me. Hopefully I can get in on the next one.
A World of Men - Mike M: Was left with questions, which is a good thing. Found it really well written and worked well within the word count limit. I did wonder though about a rescue attempt or retaliation by the others. I guess that is in the expanded version?
I have a terrible habit of trying to explain everything, but the word count limit held me in check in order to get the actual story across in full.
There's not really an expanded version per se, just some handwritten notes about the "rules" of magic and fairies. Initial concept was little more than the idea humans destroying links to the fairy world by driving iron into the accumulations of magic energies, the idea of it being retaliation from victims of fairy tales only occurred to me last week, but immediately seemed perfect to me.
I may do something further with the idea now. Oddly enough, everyone tells me this reads like a prologue when in my mind it's the end of the story.
What's going on? Isn't today the voting deadline?
Brinksmanship!Indeed it is!
Tangent - The Comfort Zone of Walter Reed the Seed: Flipping adorable. Though I'd have gone with a different name than Walter Reed. If you ever intend to do anything with this one, Id change it to something like Wally Beed or something.
The Comfort Zone of Walter Reed the Seed - Tangent: Very cute. I really enjoyed to imagine all those little seeds sitting around eating candy and reading comic books. The dramatic part of Squirmy drowning (why :'( ) could have been a bit more... well dramatic. I had to read it twice to realize, damn that cute worm really just drowned.
Just got an email from old school Writing-Ager ZephyrFate. Thought this might be a good place to note that he's got a few things on Amazon, including a short story in a collection that includes Harlan Ellison, Alan Dean Foster, and some other cool peeps.
Muslims hunt pigs/boars? Really...
15 year old girls talk like that with their fathers? Really?
Yes. She's not meant to be typical, nor redundant. Regardless, that is a matter for personality difference, where differences are debatable.
Accurately portraying a culture is a bug bear of mine. I'd be more than happy to be corrected.
On that note, I liked your story, and thought the prose was refreshingly formal, before I read the James Bond part. The prose, to me, is antithetical to post war literature. It was jarring and thus dropped down to an honourable mention.
The Muslims hunting pigs bit, an animal they consider haram to eat, in such a nonchalant way, is in my eyes, a silly mistake. I'd be perfectly happy to apologise if you can source this.
They don't hunt them to eat them. They hunt them because wild boars attack the goats.
Accurately portraying a culture is a bug bear of mine.
Having been the target of your ire once or twice, I've noticed. And it's important to get these things right. Buuuuut I think you could perhaps couch your corrections more diplomatically.
Muslims don't hunt either. Or not supposed to. But whatever. I concede.
That's not true.
http://www.al-islam.org/laws/hunting.html
It is acceptable to hunt the boar but not to eat it.
It doesn't really matter because the practices of Muslims vary by their culture and geography.
I hope the next writing challenge has a larger word limit. I found that most of the submissions would have been better if the writers had more words to work with.
The Results:
1st Place: Tangent - "The Comfort Zone of Walter Reed the Seed"
2nd Place (tie): Mike M - "A World of Men"
2nd Place (tie): DumbNameD - "Veni Creator Spiritus"
2nd Place (tie): John Dunbar - "Of Princes and Orphans"
Vote Count:
Tangent - 22 (7)
Mike M - 14 (3)
DumbNameD - 14 (2)
John Dunbar - 14 (1)
Ashes - 5
toddhunter - 4
Bombadil - 3
BananaBomb - 2
Congrats, Tangent, on another victory! In fact, something of a landslide. (also, cute story! )
I hope the next writing challenge has a larger word limit. I found that most of the submissions would have been better if the writers had more words to work with.
I hope the next writing challenge has a larger word limit. I found that most of the submissions would have been better if the writers had more words to work with.