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The Official NeoGAF General Poetry Thread #9: Look at the Bright Side

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Jangaroo

Always the tag bridesmaid, never the tag bride.
The Official NeoGAF General Poetry Thread #9: Look at the Bright Side

Theme: Look at the Bright Side

Life can be such a downer more often than not, which is why it's imperative that we focus on the brighter side of things. Of course maybe your definition of positive is different from the norm. Interpret this however you wish.

Optional Secondary Objective: Your poem must end with _________________ as it's last line. It's up to you to figure out how to make it fit in without being jarring.
ie:
I like apples.
I like oranges.
_________________.

Poetry thread Rules version 1.2:
1. This thread is not merely for winning or losing, but for critiquing and improving your own craft.
2. This poetry thread 'contest' will end on a Friday, and voting will last until Sunday at midnight. You cannot win unless you vote. Although you don't have to submit a piece to vote.
3. The winner must then provide the next challenge theme for the following two week period. Some weeks like during E3, this may not be possible, so we will have an interim one week period until normality is resumed. As a general rule, we like to keep this on the alternate week to the Creative Writing Thread.
4. There are no word count limits, make it as long or as short as you want.
5. Optional secondary objectives are not mandatory, you can include them or not.
6. Further addition to rule five: you can also try the secondary objective as a secondary piece. Just make sure you label it as such.
7. Vote for your favourite poems. Voters should award first, second and third places to their favourite three poems. Don't vote for the same author twice. And watch out for pieces that are labeled ineligible. :) Comment on these pieces are welcome but you just can't vote for it.
8. During the count, First place is allocated three points. Second place is allocated two points. And third place is allocated one point.
9. In the event of a tie, the tally will be counted again with first place being allocated three and half points. If it isn't resolved then, it will be up to the OP (most likely the previous winner) to decide to how to go about things.
10. Winner gets a round of applause and will have the records stating it as such. After which Rule 3 is in effect and we start a new thread.


Deadline: Friday, August 20, 2010 at 11:59pm, Pacific.
Voting will then begin.
You should get your votes in by: Sunday, August 22th, 2010 at 11:59pm, Pacific.
Good luck everyone.
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Previous Threads:

Poetry Thread #1; Reflection
Poetry Thread #2; Making the Blind See & 5W poems
Poetry Thread #3; Interior & Incorporate a song or album title
Poetry Thread #4; History & Dream Song poems
Poetry Thread #5; A View From Afar or Within & Clerihew poems
Poetry Thread #6; The Surreal and the Fantastical &haikus
Poetry Thread #7 - Expectations versus Reality
Poetry Thread #8 - Mirror's Edge

Courtesy of Ashes1396 (Thanks again for the reminder dude. Appreciate it).

Entries this week
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01. Jangaroo - Now
02. Dresden - High and Low
03. AnkitT - Cover your eyes
04. Bootaaay - Trev & Bill's night out on the town
05. Zapages - Prince and Farah Meeting in The Two Thrones
06. Trip Warhawkins - The coward says goodbye
07. Ashes1396 - Soft dreams treading on winter nights
08. Irish - Live the Life
09. Ashes1396 - Live
10. Alfarif - Blessed
11. goldlion054 - That Day
12. Bootaaay - Bastogne
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I

Irish

Member
Nice. The secondary seems a little odd though. Do you plan on adding in a specific line at some point in the future?
 
J

Jangaroo

Always the tag bridesmaid, never the tag bride.
Actually I was trying to be a little abstract with the secondary. That line is supposed to be just that, a line. I did that because I was kind of curious to see how others would craft their poem with that line as their ending but if it's too odd/confusing I can just switch it to another.
 
A

Ashes

Banned
In the poetry thread, we usually aim to try a form of poetry as the secondary objective. But if you want to have a blank line, it's your thread to do as you will. :)
 
J

Jangaroo

Always the tag bridesmaid, never the tag bride.
Now

Oh come closer my child,
My eyes have dimmed and blurred.
They can't seem to focus,
But I shall persevere.
Let me gaze upon you,
Just one last, final time.
For my life ends tonight.

My voice is now too hoarse,
So do me one favor,
And place those ears of yours,
Near my old, withered lips,
So that I may better
Speak to you my dearest
While bated breath still breathes.

My hair has fallen out.
My arms are now brittle.
My legs are immobile.
My bladder is useless.
My heart has grown too weak.
And my chest heaves with pain.
But do not pity me.

Others have fared far worse.
I'm in fact quite grateful.
I have a bed to lie.
These linens are quite clean.
I'm fed warm food all day.
What I want you to see,
Is that I am so blessed.

Hospitals are pricey,
But here I am right now.
Not everyone can be,
Accomodated see?
And of course I have you.
The pearl in my oyster,
For you are my treasure.

So hush now my dear child,
Don't you dare cry on me.
I've lived a decent life,
Quite far too long in fact.
Now please wipe away those
Salty, small tears of yours,
And take these parting words.

The end is not the end,
For life comes full circle.
Together up above,
I shall wait for your turn,
Like your ma before me.
So live free, no regrets.
Promise me that my dear.

Now let me close my eyes.
Now let me close my
Now let me close
Now let me
Now let
Now.
________________.
 
A

Ashes

Banned
is that meant to be looking at the brighter side of life? I can see how you would construe that but that's a really a downer of a poem if anything...
 
D

Dresden

Member
Look, you, where we fell
it was from the little rock where
all the others dived into the river,
you clung to me and I to you
as we plummeted through the air.

A scream, a gasp, gulps and silence
swallowing us whole as we sunk,
and in the water we toed the floor,
the sand shifting underneath our feet
as we rose high and fast, into the air.

You and I, we fell together, in the summer
when we went to the river. Pathos
and tragedy were forgotten as you and I,
we played by the river, the water was sweet,
and under the bright sun we swam together--
do you remember? How we fell together,
you and I, a song together.
 
A

AnkitT

Member
In my lifetime, i've seen people buying rose tinted glasses
as the play age passes, we turn to the opiate of the masses
stasis of mid life and the broken chassis of the reading glasses
yet we buy the rose tinted glasses, to do away with the clashes

in a world of contrast, only the bright are given leeway
yet we limit ourselves to talks pertaining to he say, she say
the tell tale tattle, albatross around the neck, but let bliss stay
let us forget the hardships and forge the story, mould and heat clay

broken pink shards of glass on the visor, the great divisor
the parents who avoid the vaccines manufactured by pfizer
in my open heart of hearts, fries or shakes, rather take neither
the free market force guides me, otherwise I would be none the wiser

unimaginable hatred, nation oriented pride, pride in your sect
the pride is divided amongst who demand and feign respect
look at the bright side, disease, famine, hunger, whole countries wrecked
that is what I saw, when I forgot to wear my rose tinted specs.

edit: It was a lot of fun building your poem from the last line. Nice secondary!
 
B

British Monsoon

Member
Trev & Bill's night out on the town

Venturing from their drinking hole, Trev and Bill made quite the sight
Two old boys, sauced and merry, weaving incongruously through the night
Arms about shoulder, drinks in hand and songs ever-ready at lips
Remarking loudly on the passers-by with lewd, drunken witted quips
Onwards towards the chippy they marched, eager to eat their fill
Doubling over suddenly, Trev announced 'ere, i've come over all ill!
So off to the alley he stumbled, to expunge the vileness within
While inside the chippy Bill had spied, a bird, buxom and fair of skin
He sidled over, 'ello darlin', his breath abound with booze
How's about we have a little fun, love, whatcha got to lose?
I'm with my boyfriend, she replied, words laced with contempt
But Bill pushed on oblivious, from a firm No he felt exempt
And the boyfriend, well, he just looked on, writhing in despair
As Bill twined his fingers, gently through the girl's golden hair
The door opened and Trev walked in, wiping the sick from his chin
Upon seeing Bill he whistled, See you caught a nice bit of skin!
He shoved the boyfriend out of the way and planted himself at her side
Staring at her lecherously, through bleary, beer-addled eyes
Hands off, I seen her first, warned Bill, but Trev cared not one bit
Pawing at her none-to-gently, she turned and into his face did spit
Trev recoiled backwards in disgust, and stumbled over a chair
Knocking tables and patrons about, flinging food into the air
The girl stormed out with boyfriend in tow, using the moment to escape
Bill looked toward Trev in disgust, That's the last mistake you'll make.
What the fuck you talkin' 'bout Bill? Like she was gonna go with you?
Had more chance than you, didn't I? At least i'm not covered in puke.
The shop owner wailed Enough! Enough! You get out! I call police!
They looked around at the chaos caused and felt their hate decrease
With a smile on his lips, Leg it!, said Bill, voicing a shared thought
Leaving behind to clean up the mess, the owner, now quite distraught
They came to a stop a few streets away, exhausted and out of breath
Now Bill heaved up his guts, Fuckin' hell, Trev, I feel like death
So off home they did wander, and from beer they swore to abstain
Knowing that after work next week they would do it all again
For it's the simple things in life that make it all worth to live
And sometimes a story told and laughter shared is all happiness asks you give.

.
chippy = shop that sells fries :p
.

*edit, congrats on the win Jangaroo :)
 
Z

Zapages

Member
ok here goes nothing... a special from my vaults of gaming. I kind of laugh at it now though. But oh well. :)

Prince and Farah Meeting in The Two Thrones

As I battled through everything
everything that I once loved
this heart filled with rage
fighting with everything I had
I had no remorse in me
until that I saw her again
everything around me stopped
everything changed

this heart filled now love filled
my heart started pound fast
all those days without you
what should I do?
All those memories we had
Or at least I had with you
How would she react?

We start to fight together
Just like in Sands of Time
Her personality
Has changed, since Sands of Time
What does this have to happen to me
What is life who saw his love die
What is life who’s love has come back
A love that doesn’t remember him
Yet I don’t want to let her go this time around

What is life without you
What is death without beside me
Tell me my heart what to do
My heart is telling me that you the one for me
And always will be
Lets go fight because the time is running out
Fight to a common goal like before.
We start fighting together to a
Just like in Sands of Time
Trying to end the cries of the universe
The cries of misery and sand affected creatures
Just trying end their sorrow and misery

This city tells me we are alone together
This planet tells me we are alone together
This universe tells me are alone together
The heaven pours
The love we used to have
as we fight together

Fighting together
Solving puzzles together
I wish this would last forever
Together we make the souls of the sand creature
To rest in peace for the last time I hope.
Together we fight once again

What should I do?
not to make the same mistakes again
Trust her again and not make the same mistake again
Like in Sands of Time

And hopefully everything will be fine
As we rule Persia and India together
As we shared the same dream to peace
And to end this war that raged our land
For one last time as we fight together

-Zapages
 
B

Barbacoatl

Banned
Missed the past one, it's hard to keep up with this and the writing challenges! Oh and good stuff already, hope to see many more. Here are some bitter words

The coward says goodbye

My stupid ways of connecting,
my halfway truths and lies
it's all inside, dear
but you refuse to let me die

It's easy to you, huh?
just tell us how easy it is
to bring me down / with such little effort
right down to your pretty knees

I wear your stockings on my face
"they smell real good", I say
the smile on your face / naughtier than nice
tells me tonight we're getting laid (noice!)

But I won't, I really don't want
to keep loving without love
with passion that gives me a rash
sent you an email last night / hope my computer had crashed
cause it was stupid and selfish and nuts
nothing I can hide from you, Persian eyes

I was never yours / but you had to have me
with your shifting overtones
and your happy trampling
you're so full of life, yet so full of shit
I took long to realize
we were always in the shade

So I guess we're both fuck buddies,
I guess we're fallen angels (nah)
but fuck you for not letting yourself go
and try for once to fall in love
________!!!
 
A

Alfarif

This picture? uhh I can explain really!
*checks watch* It took that long? For shame! *realizes he hasn't posted yet* Um... yeah... :lol :lol
 
A

Ashes

Banned
I'm going to enter two poems this week.
For the first one, I've tried to meet the op's goal of looking at the the bright side. I hope it makes people smile from within.
For the secondary objective, I focused on that silent line. This one is about reflection. I hope I got what the op meant. And I don't really dedicate poems or stuff, but this I will dedicate I think...
We've already got six, hopefully, we can make it a dozen before the deadline closes. cheers everybody, and remember to vote! :p
 
A

Ashes

Banned
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Soft dreams treading on winter nights


Fly away on a paper plane,
out the bedroom window,
fear not the embarking, take the reign,
through the cold and blue night air.

Even with the eyes closed,
the stars sparkle,
glittering and fraying,
one million miles away.

Look, there the witch flies,
A smile in her eye,
as she leads the merry men,
dancing to and fro round the cold camp fire.

Above the dark evergreen forests, we race,
The wind, our very steed.
The wind. No, the wind flows through the gaps in our clothes,
igniting the heart and bringing forth
a pure unabashed smile.

Shooting stars far above,
the lovely dark ocean, beneath,
the dust flutters about in the moonset,
as the city snuggled behind the shimmering clouds
lingers between this world and that.

Soft dreams tread upon winter nights,
This, sir, is what my dreams are made of,
this is sir, my childhood bottled.


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I

Irish

Member
Fuckin' deadlines, how do they work?

(Damn, I am lucky. I thought submissions ended earlier today. Gotta work on my poem now.)
 
I

Irish

Member
Bright clouds gather overhead.
What I need, the doctor said.

White spades fallin' from the skies.
Dig deep where the beauty lies.

Dark thoughts will be our demise.
Light shades keep us mesmerized.

Bad men will lead us astray.
Ignore them and live your way.

Leave behind your doubt-filled life.
Live in a world absent strife.

Whittle down the reasons now.
Create something, we'll go "Wow!"

Forget the silence, go loud.
Head out there and makes us proud.
 
J

Jangaroo

Always the tag bridesmaid, never the tag bride.
Hey, new entries! Awesome jawesome. Deadline is by 11:59pm tonight. It's already been repeated like five times already but just for good measure I always say.
 
A

Ashes

Banned
Live*

In dreams, the soul awakes,
springs light, where none remains.

In barley fields, she awaits,
my love... her hand outstretched.

The smell of earth, after rain
casting a ripple, in the deepest lakes.

The places, we went to,
the people we saw,
the life we lived,
all of it, quintessential.

For those left standing, all becomes clear,
Live. Hear the sound the wind makes...
_______________.





*dedicated to the dearly departed.
 
A

Alfarif

This picture? uhh I can explain really!
Blessed

There is a brightness.
A singular star.
A way forward.
A return home.
Carved in the essence of the greatest of kings
Given over to philanthropic things
Marked and given, shielded by the heart of gods
Thank you.
The path is lain.
Tread where you will into the hands of the waiting
The willing
The holy
The wings of a choir singing praise.
Tomorrow will come and bless the breath that you've given
Drip the legacy of what it means to be
Into the veins of the listening.
Then there I will stand,
A vessel to accept the truths
Where none would wish to dwell.
There I will stand,
Beside the womb of creation
Where the heart still throbs in anguish.
There I will stand,
To remember who you were
And cast off the wronged.
And there I will be
Great three fold king,
Giving over everything.
Blessed be, old friend.

For today, I breathe.
 
A

Alfarif

This picture? uhh I can explain really!
Ashes1396 said:
Live*

In dreams, the soul awakes,
springs light, where none remains.

In barley fields, she awaits,
my love... her hand outstretched.

The smell of earth, after rain
casting a ripple, in the deepest lakes.

The places, we went to,
the people we saw,
the life we lived,
all of it, quintessential.

For those left standing, all becomes clear,
Live. Hear the sound the wind makes...
_______________.





*dedicated to the dearly departed.
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I'm in that kind of mood but the last three lines made me tear up. Beautifully done, Ashes. Seriously.
 
G

goldlion054

Member
That Day

I always open my eyes and
imagine that day. The agony of
what i had done and had become
in those winding moments is often to much
to bare. It all goes back to that day

I often conceive what she was
thinking that day. Sometimes its a snicker
to myself. Other times i hit the bottom
and need help up. It always feels familiar
much like that day

Does she remember me fondly even after what
happened that day? Singing, and dancing, and
laughing; does she remember any of that? How
could she, really? One of us had to escape
and that day
__________________


Just noticed the thread was up, and had to hustle and idea out. But i like it anyway
 
B

British Monsoon

Member
Oh shit, late entry (I was asleeeeeep, and too drunk to do it last night x_x), it's a bit rushed, but hope it still counts;

Bastogne

In an instant, everything is changed
Chaos unfurls it's banner
Dark red on a field of black
Tattered and worn
Soot marked and bullet torn
Stained by centuries of war.

They cower in their foxholes
Wincing at every concussion
Helpless and isolated
Praying for the artillery to cease
As around them men die in pain
The Luck of the draw.

Just like that, the barrage stops
Slowly, sound returns to their ears
And the survivors creep forth
Tentative and wary
Staring about in dismay
At the unspeakable bloodshed caused.

All at once, the guns resume their fire
And they scramble once again
Desperate to find cover
Desperate to escape this madness
Desperate to go home and live
Desperate to _________________
 
A

Ashes

Banned
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Entries this week
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01. Jangaroo - Now
02. Dresden - High and Low
03. AnkitT - Cover your eyes
04. Bootaaay - Trev & Bill's night out on the town
05. Zapages - Prince and Farah Meeting in The Two Thrones
06. Trip Warhawkins - The coward says goodbye
07. Ashes1396 - Soft dreams treading on winter nights
08. Irish - Live the Life
09. Ashes1396 - Live
10. Alfarif - Blessed
11. goldlion054 - That Day
12. Bootaaay - Bastogne

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Quick reminder:
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* Any level of crit is welcome.
* Vote for your favourite three poems, ranking them first, second, and third.
* If you have submitted a poem, you have to vote in order to be eligible to win.
* You don't have to have submitted a poem to vote.
* You should get your votes in by: Sunday, August 27th, 2010 at 11:59pm, Pacific. (7am GMT Monday)
* See op for more details.

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Good luck everyone!
 
J

Jangaroo

Always the tag bridesmaid, never the tag bride.
Thanks for the compilation post dude. I'll read through the entries to give in my votes later tonight.

Edit: Okay, I gave the entries a good reading. Solid stuff as always guys. Had to reread a bunch of the entries twice since it was really hard to figure out which one to pick and narrow down.

1st) Dresden - Absolutely fantastic poem. The lines just flowed very rhythmically. Loved it.
2nd) Ashes1396 - Both of your poems were absolutely lovely. I had a hard time choosing between the two but I have to give it to Live if only for the fact that the last three lines were absolutely touching.
3rd) Bootaaay - Loved the imagery here. I couldn't help but feel a sense of attachment towards the two despite both of them being quite distasteful. A rather interesting perspective on the topic.
 
B

British Monsoon

Member
1. Ashes1396 - Soft dreams treading on winter nights - some wonderful imagery in this one and the last few lines couldn't help but evoke a smile.
2. Jangaroo - Now - really well written piece, I kind of agreed with Ashes at first, in regards to it being somewhat of a downer, but on reflection that was only because it reminded me of people I've had to watch wither in old age, but the sentiment is beautiful even if the feelings it evoked aren't, if that makes sense, lol
3. Dresden - High and Low - beautiful piece, that, as Jagaroo also remarked, flows wonderfully well.

HM; Alfarif - I absolutely adored the ending, but unfortunately the rest didn't entirely click with me. Goldlion054 - I really enjoyed this one, but felt that, excluding the repetition of 'that day', it seemed a bit too prosaic.
 
C

Cyan

Banned
1. Dresden - High and Low
2. Ashes1396 - Soft dreams treading on winter nights
3. Alfarif - Blessed
 
A

Ashes

Banned
Jangaroo - Now : It was pretty good but was let down a bit with the use of cliche's like 'pearl in my oyster'. That's not to say it felt out of place, it didn't, but I would have like to have seen a new take on this. It also felt longer then it needed to be.

Dresden - high and low : It was a very intricately weaved poem, and I quite liked it in that respect. The line about pathos and tragedy, was where it came unstuck for me.

Notes: Those were probably the best two poems to start a poetry thread since our records began. Not only did I think they were good, but I sincerely enjoyed them as well.

AnkitT - Cover your eyes : you sure did build from the ending. :) It wrapped up wonderfully, but for the longest while, the piece lacked coherence and cohesion.

Bootaaay - Trev & Bill's night out on the town : I like the story being told, if only the momentum from the last 8 lines shared the tic-tac-toe effect of the lines before it. They felt too long, so the ryhmes from then on were harder to acknowledge.

Notes: Yes, this is going to be really hard to judge. Whoever wins ought to be pretty happy with themselves.

Zapages - Prince and Farah Meeting in The Two Thrones : The poem had too many parts that fell out of sync, causing a jarring effect. I think this needs some editing, as this could be a good poem with a little house cleaning.

Trip Warhawkins - The coward says goodbye : I enjoyed this quite a bit. Some of the juxtapositions were juxtapositions alright but messed about with rythym too much.

Notes: Another fun poem, and a new person has arrived. :)

Irish: Live the Life - An odd little poem I thought, at first, but I didn't much care about that, because I loved it in the end. Quirky British sense of humour perhaps, I don't know. Read this to my niece, and she would shout the second part loudly. She seemed to enjoy it. I don't think many people will appreciate it, but I for one thought it was fun and natural in the way good nursery rhymes are. Good stuff. It may have helped that we were watching The Great Escape, and the main theme, provided a good track to this when this poem finished.

Alfarif - Blessed - It flowed nicely, but I never really got the entire picture. And line 8: "thank you", was where I started wondering what was happening. Who was being thanked? Having said that, I think this is one of your best pieces, which seems to be inkeeping with a lot of the stuff so far. I'm quite intriuged as to what this one was about. Explanation please.

Notes: I think I'm going to be a little bit controversial with my votes. hmm... then again maybe not. :/

goldlion054 - That Day : oh very mysterious. Even though this was yet another one that I quite liked, I think this probably needs the most editing out of the ones I really liked. On second thoughts, this probably makes sense considering how it came about. Making my comment redundant as it were. :(

Bootaaay - Bastogne : okay fuck. First of, I have no idea who I'm going to vote for now. This thread is full of winners. Sorry about that. Okay comment. Some brilliant lines there. "soot marked and bullet torn". Didn't enjoy the ending so much though. I think perhaps it was because you left it hanging, almost; whilst everyone else formed a resolution. ON second thoughts, having reread the poem a couple of times, if the intention was to signify that somebody had shot the 'person' dead, in the midst of the poem, then I would say, well done, what a way to end the poem.

Notes: Safe to say that was a very good run of poems. It was my favourite selection of poems, so by virtue, the best thread we've had so far I think.

Votes:

1. Irish - Live the life
2. Bootaaay - Bastongne
3. Dresden - High and low
 
A

Ashes

Banned
Results

1. Dresden - High and Low 8**
2. Ashes1396 - Soft dreams treading on winter nights 5*
3. Irish - Live the Life 3*
3. goldlion054 - That Day 3*
3. Jangaroo – Now 3
3. Bootaaay - Trev & Bill's night out on the town 3

Rest of the results

4. Ashes1396 – Live 2
4. Bootaaay – Bastogne 2
5. Alfarif – Blessed 1
6.AnkitT - Cover your eyes
6. Zapages - Prince and Farah Meeting in The Two Thrones
6. Trip Warhawkins - The coward says goodbye

*no of first places.

It was only a matter of time, and so Congratulations are in order for Dresden! Doubly so, because I think you won the strongest poetry thread we've had, in my opinion. Not to mention that we have six people on the podium!
 
B

British Monsoon

Member
Congrats Dresden, a well deserved win :)

Ashes1396 said:
ON second thoughts, having reread the poem a couple of times, if the intention was to signify that somebody had shot the 'person' dead, in the midst of the poem, then I would say, well done, what a way to end the poem.
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Yeah, I was using the __________ to signify the soldiers foxhole getting hit with an artillery shell. I probably could have made that more clear, and don't really like the way I repeated 'Desperate to'.
 
A

Alfarif

This picture? uhh I can explain really!
Oops. I kind of forgot to vote.

So... here's what my votes WOULD have been:

1) Ashes - Live
2) Jangaroo - Now
3) goldlion054 - That Day

Ashes1396 said:
Alfarif - Blessed - It flowed nicely, but I never really got the entire picture. And line 8: "thank you", was where I started wondering what was happening. Who was being thanked? Having said that, I think this is one of your best pieces, which seems to be inkeeping with a lot of the stuff so far. I'm quite intriuged as to what this one was about. Explanation please.
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It's to my mom's fiance. I was aiming to express two different things: 1) that he was going to "heaven" or whatever you may believe in and 2) that my family would be strong and move forward in life, never forgetting who he was.
 
A

Ashes

Banned
Alfarif said:
Oops. I kind of forgot to vote.

So... here's what my votes WOULD have been:

1) Ashes - Live
2) Jangaroo - Now
3) goldlion054 - That Day



It's to my mom's fiance. I was aiming to express two different things: 1) that he was going to "heaven" or whatever you may believe in and 2) that my family would be strong and move forward in life, never forgetting who he was.
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Thanks. tis only a shame, you didn't vote in time. I thought that poem deserved to be in the top six. But being it's author was probably why I thought that. :)

edit: feel free to post how you would have voted. :)
 
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