Some short comments:
Timedog: This was confusing to read at times, which I guess was intentional. In the end I didn't really understand what was going on but I liked the banter between Carl and Mitchell.
Zakalwe: I really didn't see the twist coming and I liked that. Not sure how someone would be able to perform heart surgery on oneself though. Or any transplantation for that matter.
Chainsawkitten: It's funny how this might actually the most upbeat piece of yours that I've read. I'm not gonna write much about this though because I fear that my bone-deep hatred of everything that has anything to do with Kafka will get the better of me and I'll end up writing a 2000 word essay about said hatred. But I do think that you caught the essentials of The Metamorphosis quite well.
SquiddyCracker: After having read Zakalwe's story the twist in this one was kind of obvious, which isn't your fault of course. I had a bit trouble imagining the Myrr. Shouldn't there have been more acts of their revenge if they are treated like a common pest everywhere, resulting in the realization that they are indeed more intelligent then they seem.
Mike M: That wasn't as bad as you made us believe your first drafts were
The whole twist that Anton and his partner are secretly harvesting organs came a little bit out of the blue though, which I guess is kind of what a twist is supposed to do but for me it just threw the story in a weird direction. I think I might have actually preferred a slice of life gay romance.
QuantumBro : A little bit too weird for my taste. I was always looking for some hint as to understand what was going on but it didn't come. And stuff like the witch and the outsiders didn't really help to clear this confusion. I know that this must have been at least partly intentional but personally I would have liked a bit more clarity on what was going on.
exifixate: The twerking might have been a little too much but as a whole this was really funny and I liked the idea. I would have loved to see the demon realm and society a bit more fleshed out though.
Sober: I don't thing I'll ever understand twitter. Though to be fair it isn't all that popular over here. I actually don't know a single person who uses it (which doesn't keep some of them to post #stupidnonsense stuff on their facebook all the time thoug:/).
Tangent : I think by now it is save to say that you are somewhat obsessed with bunnies
I actually think that this is one would have profited from some polishing. But i loved the atmosphere you created.
FlowersisBritish: I think I understood what you were going for pretty quick, but think that you overdid a bit lengthwise because the story got hard to follow after a time. Neat idea though.
Cyan: I enjoined the part of the mission itself but would have liked to learn a little bit more about the stream. Not about it's physics but what significance it has for that particular universe (galaxy?) and a bit more about the role of the climbers... but yeah word count is a bitch, tell me about it...
Ashes : Liked the part where the main character talks with his sister. Your portrayal of emotions was spot on as always.
Nezumi: Like I already said in my post above, this was kind of a test run for a setting I plan on using for my next NaNo project. But I didn't plan this according to the word count at all and had to leave out a lot. So I had way too little descriptions and explanations and action and... yeah... suits me right for actually trying to plan my stories.
Charade: For this I would have wished for some more background. What was so bad about the war the first king started, what did the new one do wrong to lose his head as well. The writing was really good though.
And here are my votes. Like always it wasn't easy to choose and the similarities in themes and concepts made it even harder this week.
1.)Zakalwe
2.)exifixate
3.)Ashes
HM: Tangent
Timedog: This was confusing to read at times, which I guess was intentional. In the end I didn't really understand what was going on but I liked the banter between Carl and Mitchell.
Zakalwe: I really didn't see the twist coming and I liked that. Not sure how someone would be able to perform heart surgery on oneself though. Or any transplantation for that matter.
Chainsawkitten: It's funny how this might actually the most upbeat piece of yours that I've read. I'm not gonna write much about this though because I fear that my bone-deep hatred of everything that has anything to do with Kafka will get the better of me and I'll end up writing a 2000 word essay about said hatred. But I do think that you caught the essentials of The Metamorphosis quite well.
SquiddyCracker: After having read Zakalwe's story the twist in this one was kind of obvious, which isn't your fault of course. I had a bit trouble imagining the Myrr. Shouldn't there have been more acts of their revenge if they are treated like a common pest everywhere, resulting in the realization that they are indeed more intelligent then they seem.
Mike M: That wasn't as bad as you made us believe your first drafts were
QuantumBro : A little bit too weird for my taste. I was always looking for some hint as to understand what was going on but it didn't come. And stuff like the witch and the outsiders didn't really help to clear this confusion. I know that this must have been at least partly intentional but personally I would have liked a bit more clarity on what was going on.
exifixate: The twerking might have been a little too much but as a whole this was really funny and I liked the idea. I would have loved to see the demon realm and society a bit more fleshed out though.
Sober: I don't thing I'll ever understand twitter. Though to be fair it isn't all that popular over here. I actually don't know a single person who uses it (which doesn't keep some of them to post #stupidnonsense stuff on their facebook all the time thoug:/).
Tangent : I think by now it is save to say that you are somewhat obsessed with bunnies
FlowersisBritish: I think I understood what you were going for pretty quick, but think that you overdid a bit lengthwise because the story got hard to follow after a time. Neat idea though.
Cyan: I enjoined the part of the mission itself but would have liked to learn a little bit more about the stream. Not about it's physics but what significance it has for that particular universe (galaxy?) and a bit more about the role of the climbers... but yeah word count is a bitch, tell me about it...
Ashes : Liked the part where the main character talks with his sister. Your portrayal of emotions was spot on as always.
Nezumi: Like I already said in my post above, this was kind of a test run for a setting I plan on using for my next NaNo project. But I didn't plan this according to the word count at all and had to leave out a lot. So I had way too little descriptions and explanations and action and... yeah... suits me right for actually trying to plan my stories.
Charade: For this I would have wished for some more background. What was so bad about the war the first king started, what did the new one do wrong to lose his head as well. The writing was really good though.
And here are my votes. Like always it wasn't easy to choose and the similarities in themes and concepts made it even harder this week.
1.)Zakalwe
2.)exifixate
3.)Ashes
HM: Tangent