Wow that template looks amazing. Is that something you got in Word?
No, I put it together in Google docs.Wow that template looks amazing. Is that something you got in Word?
I wish I met more people as interested in the writing community as you when I was taking workshop classes.I am nothing if not dependable for these things. Except when I link all the entries to the same person and botch the vote tabulation in Excel.
There are a handful of impressively professional writers on GAF, and I'm glad the writing community is as open as it is so I can try to at least contribute. A lot of you have good attitudes. It is hard to find quality like that and it's great to see it here.I'm something of an enthusiastic idiot when it comes to a writing community, though I know more what I'm talking about than I used to. I thrive on feedback, and I can talk with someone about their story for ages. It took me a while to rein in my habit if prescriptivism, but I think I'm mostly there. Plus I think I do a decent job of not getting defensive, either.
Ooo. Whats the template called or how did you do it?No, I put it together in Google docs.
I wish I met more people as interested in the writing community as you when I was taking workshop classes.
Didn't see Ashes post this time. Too bad. I always look forward to what he's got to say.
It might be possible if Adobe Acrobat is available as an app.I only have my phone/ipad for the next week.
Would anyone be kind enough to download my pdf, password it with the usual password, and email me a copy please?
PM me if you'll be able to help.
Unless anyone knows a way for me to do this on te technology I have access to?
Thanks.
I'm not sure what specifically you're asking about. I set left and right margins at 1.6". Created a horizontal line break beneath the title and above the footer. Font throughout is Goudy Bookletter 1911.Ooo. Whats the template called or how did you do it?
It might be possible if Adobe Acrobat is available as an app.
My link's to your post itself, so it's fine.I was being incredibly unobservant/lazy, apologies.
Pages has the option. I use Pages.
I updated my link (exact same document, just passworded) and broke Mike's.
Didn't see Ashes post this time.
My link's to your post itself, so it's fine.
Namenlos - Mike M
You did a great job creating imagery while moving the story forward fast. I loved the detail of how the witches looked, and climbing up walls/ceilings somehow brought the whole scene to life. The tension between the witches and the hunter felt very real. It wasn't totally clear why the witches found the grimoire hard to decipher and the hunter could understand it so easily. I loved this story!
That bugs the shit out of me as well. I'm usually good at catching stuff like that, too : /Mike M: This one felt very fleshed-out and although it was only a single scene, I felt like I understood everything presented and had a complete visualization of the environment and characters. The entire imagery and movements of Einhorn (God, I love the word sobriquet) were so well described. The only flaws I was able to pinpoint are nitpicky and grammar centric – at one point you used the phrase “burning garment” in two consecutive sentences, but that sort of thing always gets to me.
Dandy Crocodile: Welcome to Mike Ms House of Critiquing Pain : P Seriously though, this was well written with a stellar use of imagery. It feels more like prewriting for something else, honestly, because this seems like more of a character study/background story than something intended to stand alone. Granted that short stories dont exactly map well to a three act structure with try/fail cycles and mounting tension, I still felt that the arc of this one was more of straight line heading upward. From the outset, Beni is at his darkest hour and nadir of the story, and from that point onward everything just continually gets better for him until he achieves his dream of being a drag queen. Beni himself had extraordinary little characterization, most of his pagetime being spent on describing the technical aspects of doing his drag makeup. Duane, Benis father, and Benis grandmother were comparatively small roles, but in their brief appearances you packed them with more features than you invested in Beni throughout the whole thing. Charming, but not particularly compelling with weak to nonexistent conflict to play Beni off.
Aaron:
Zakalwe: The first scene had enough cognitive dissonance to sour me right from the start. Frank gets a jab in on Cece about her desire to change her name, but then we spend the rest of the time elaborating how Frank is otherwise considered defective and chose his own name. There’s no grounding by which I could believe that he would have legitimately criticized Cece’s desire to change her name or destiny or whatever. I rolled my eyes at the notion of a kid hacking the system seemingly without effort.
Mike: This was very tight, you set up your world, characters, and plot so quickly and efficiently I felt I was reading something much longer. Your descriptions are spot on here, opening really strongly, same with dialogue. I really like the idea of a nameless one, and thus being more or less immune to magic, but I am left wondering what are the downsides? What exactly did he gain and leave behind?
I'm glad the symbolism of the pancakes was clear. Thanks!Great illustrations, it added so much to the tone of the story. It became really clear why football meant so much to the character as his place to finally fit in. I didn't really understand the rules of the church, and it was confusing why the character lied and covered his tracks in the first place if he was then willing to keep doing football once found out. I loved the end. Pancakes somehow representing his family valuing him and him realizing he can get pancakes elsewhere!
I wonder if it's somehow "cheating" to say "based on a true story!"I read this keeping in mind your comment on it being a true story and that definitely made it more interesting. The story flowed nicely and I enjoyed the running theme of pancakes and what they meant to him, haha.
I didn't know that the number of possible folds was a real thing until I asked someone after reading your feedback. Your feedback is getting more and more hilarious: like the bit about Fresno and the central valley. Lol. Also, cool that you know a lot about the JW church. I didn't know all those rules until I met the person this story was based off of. I felt like I got a good impression of the church after seeing the movie, "Big Eyes," in fact. Good point: I didn't think that it could be interpreted that the minister is asking when the kid will quit the church, if he can't follow the rules. I want to start using the word, "sportsball" all the time. I think I like it more than sobriquet, even.He folded the paper in half at least 10 times? Reeeeeally? Sure he didn’t max out at six or seven like he would in the real world? : ) Growing up in Fresno, I think the untold story here is the immense suffering that poor Kevin is going to experience being moved out there. Man, what a complete and utter desolate shithole he’s going to live in. Poor guy. Cole’s story was good too. A bit on the simple side, but I wouldn’t expect a kid to be super sophisticated in his wordsmithing, so it fits. A well-done exploration of the challenges of growing up in a JW household. My only real beef is that the ending was telegraphed the moment that the Minister asked Cole if he was going to quit on Monday. Given how we established from the first paragraph that Cole wasn’t particularly faithful, I initially--albeit briefly--interpreted that as being a question from a surprisingly understanding religious official asking if Cole was going to quit the church on Monday. From that point on, it was a foregone conclusion, especially with the title. But we had a good feel for Cole’s character, the Minister was something of a melodrama villain (not a bad thing), there was a conflict, there was escalation, and there was a satisfying resolution. Nice job. Unfortunately, I’m docking one million points for writing a story about sportsball.
Though I wish I were able to show more of the conflict a young adult might have... on one hand having respect for something you've grown up in, and on the other hand, feeling like there are inconsistencies that are making your life unnecessarily difficult. For the record, now the MC, in real life, as an adult, thinks the church was a just horrible for him. It's interesting how one can go through so many transitions as they grow.Tangent: this was very sweet, and i like the visual aids I also like the MC’s conflict with religion. The fact you showed the religious side early on makes the end choice of football more meaningful.
I didn't like the LEGO dude and bear mascot as much either. Good point, though, I could have just left them out all together. Yeah, I wish I did a better job of exploring the internal conflict. I wasn't sure how to do so, but will work on it. I have to admit to you though, this isn't directly my story, but the story of a very good friend of mine.Loved it, this is exactly the kind of thing I was hoping for in setting memoir as the secondary. Great, real, heartfelt reflection on life. I thought the pictures were fitting, but for the LEGO dude and bear mascot. Those come through without showing them. The stick figures work great (and are consistently funny). Formatting could be honed a bit, but that's nitpicking. A little more time might be given to explore the internal conflict as narrator grows into his new self. Find it hard to suggest anything besides that. Thanks for sharing.
Everyone needs to get on my level : PWhat a real slobberknocker. Also wow there was a lot of feedback this round.
Everyone needs to get on my level : P
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(Seriously though, someone double check my math. I've fucked this up in the past)