Mike M: When that owl showed up i got genuinely excited at the recognition. I said it when I first read it, and will say it again, i think you got something here. The world works on rules that make it a good mix of clever and funny, and you prove that outside of the trio. The dragon being pained at bad pronunciation, the the rules of hospitality, there is a lot of good stuff here to make reading this pretty fun. As a short story, it was good though I wonder if I would be following along as well if I didn't remember so much of the first? Also, ending was a little too neatly resolved for me to really like. For real question though, are you doing something with them?
Tangent: Strong beginning, especially that "nobody even said happy birthday." I kind of teared up a little at the end. It just did a good job of making what should be a horribly depressing place rather likable. I especially loved the interaction between Richy and Ethel. That was probably the strongest party, and made me really like Richy. Glad to hear other kids existed there too, but Richy felt like the stand out here, and kind of wished we got more development on him.
Cyan: There was a certain pompousness to the way this was written that reminded me a lot of Victorian writings. At least in terms of setting. Pretty sure it’s not, since a lot of the problems feel like they're about being out of time and out of touch. Anyway, with that style there is a real heaviness in descriptions that this lacked. Normally, I don’t really pay much attention to that sort of stuff, but I felt the big party at the end was rather underdescribed, and overall a lot of this felt sparse. Hmmm, wonder if any of that has to do with the word count? Edit: Also if we had to chose the titles, I'd go with the Whitnell Reputation.
Ashes: Its always weird when you break out of the fourth wall to address the reader. It was useful, and I really liked learning about the various bits of wedding culture, but it was weird and though interesting to read, the jump back into traditional narrative is a little jarring. I know you were talking about word count, but I would have liked a bit more words in here to help flesh out some things. Mostly, the various family connections. I tended to get lost as to who was related to who, though that could very much be because I’m not used to the names.
Nezumi: This was weird, but in a lot of ways I liked! The mix of unusual and dreamlike elements really gave it a fairly unique feel. It was the wealth of descriptions within this that worked the most, mostly everything revolving around the bathhouse. Story in general was pretty odd(in a good way), but I mostly liked how apathetic some of the bird people felt about the whole thing.