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(New Colin Moriarty Show) The Mysterious Third Amendment -- Colin's Last Stand

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Here's some honest and non-sarcastic feedback:
- Clean your room. The genre of video hot takes spoken in front of a wall of detritus is gross. Maybe audiences like this because it shows that a person has character, but it looks unprofessional and catches visual attention that should be directed towards the content.

- Bring your audience up to your level, don't lower yourself to theirs. If the goal is not to make a bundle of money but instead to educate and share, engage with subjects at a high level. Don't make a video unless your video adds value over existing material. You have a twitter feed, if your whole point is "Did You Know: The U.S. Didn't Have an Income Tax Until The Early 20th Century" then just link the Wikipedia article. Look at something like Last Week Tonight and observe where it succeeds and fails. It succeeds when it does a mature and cogent synthesis of an issue that people are not aware of but should be, and it fails when it's a junior high school lecture about basic features of the US. And if you are going to be doing this from a 101 perspective, with a target audience of junior high school students who have no civic engagement, at least experiment with the form of the video.

- Hire a research assistant that has an understanding of history beyond the undergraduate level to write a solid synthesis. There is no value in doing this if you are only going to read some of a single book, and some high level Wiki-like overviews, and read verbatim. Research is not about finding out what sources have said, it's about actually adding value through your synthesis. Ideally it's about doing original research. As long as the Patreon is making this much money, you can hire a PhD student. My wife is friends with someone who is a popular YouTube personality in the science sphere and he hired a researcher to work for him. It's not an admission of failure, it's an admission of humility. With the first month's Patreon revenue, it'd be possible to buy all the needed equipment and hire a part-time researcher for a year. Even if long-term this will not be sustainable, invest now.

- Whatever text prompting solution is being used is not working because the eye movement of reading is palpable. Work on practicing in front of a teleprompter and record yourself and try to catch yourself reading. If you don't feel comfortable enough to speak extemporaneously, that's OK, but it should at least feel like you are.


I personally would not feel comfortable taking money from patrons if I was not already professionally skilled at doing something. On the job learning seems pretty inappropriate when you've just secured this kind of financial commitment from individual donors.

If you want more of my advice, please give to my Patreon.

Please start a Patreon you deserve 40k a month tbh

Seriously I hope Colin reads that and is at least partially humbled.
 
I personally would not feel comfortable taking money from patrons if I was not already professionally skilled at doing something. On the job learning seems pretty inappropriate when you've just secured this kind of financial commitment from individual donors.

To be fair, he probably never would have had a better chance than now. His 15 minutes of fame to get easy money from unfiltered assholes trying to live vicariously through him would have passed and his opportunity with it. I highly doubt most people would have cared in the year he took to learn; another footnote in a long line of people siphoning money from the easily persuaded, reactionary alt-right.
 
Boring as hell. Same robot delivery he had on Colin was right, but now he's talking about a subject that lacks colour.



Was he being ironic? I can't tell, lol.

He really needs to take a public speaking class. His delivery is one of the reasons I could barely deal with the couple of times I watched his previous show.
 
I'm looking forward to seeing what he does with the show and channel going forward, and even though I enjoyed the episode it was dry and oftentimes felt like – as others have said – a regurgitation of a Wikipedia article. (especially with the constant reading verbatim from other sources)

I agree with stump's suggestions on the last page. He said on his last GOG show that he is thinking about hiring a research assistant, and when Nick asked him about the teleprompter it sounded like a temporary solution. (I noticed that as well)
 
Not sure why Colin isn't leaning into his strength that, whatever you think of his politics, is just talking to people. Use an edited interview as the centerpiece, build around it.
 
I think it's an OK video, probably too drab if you're not a history fan, or if you are a history fan and already know most of the basic information surrounding the Intolerable Acts and the 3rd Amendment. I guess that would make the target audience for this video pretty small.

War was fought over precious colonial real estate in the New World

Did his stuff on the French and Indian War, especially this quote come across as weird to anyone else? Like, I guess we all assume that everyone knows that the "precious colonial real estate" was already inhabited, and that the "New World" was only new to white Europeans. Still, a cursory statement or something about Native individuals more in-depth than "they fought against the British alongside the French" would have been nice. He also references circumstances surrounding North American land that would result when "multiple eager governments" wanted to obtain control of that land, without mentioning that he's only referring to European governments, not the governments of Native American people.

I am happy to have found this article in his Bibliography, since it's an interesting Alaska-WWII case involving the 3rd Amendment I'd never heard of before.
 
As someone with no real interest in early american history beyond Hamilton lol this video - elementary level or not - is fine for a casual watch, albeit not impressive.

In the meantime I'm eagerly awaiting his first episode on Europe, because I expect the worst.
 
As someone who has been pretty eager / interested to see what Colin was up to, I found this.....not what I was expecting. I differ with Colin on some politics and agree with him in regards to others, but either way I do always like to hear him talk about the things he's interested in. I enjoyed his appearances on both Joe Rogan and Rubin, and while I realized this was a history focused thing, I really thought he would tie his topics in much more heavily with current events. I also guess, if he is going to just deep dive on history specifically in some of these videos, that he's going to have to pursue far more interesting topics. The 3rd amendment isn't gonna be the type of thing more casual history fans are gonna care much about, and especially so if you aren't from the US.

Idk, I think this was a bit of a stumble out the gate for CLS if I'm being honest.
 
Uh, your teacher is doing a bad job then.

I learned about the Bill of Rights in elementary school and again in middle school and my public school system was ranked 51 our of 50 states plus DC, in multiple metrics, during my education.

Maybe we went to better schools than you.
I go to one of the best public school systems in the state of Ohio. I personally believe my teachers to be incredibly intellegent individuals who are great at what they do-especially in the social science department. The third ammendment was just brushed upon in both AP (college level) classes. I passed the US history test and am on pace to get a 5 (highest score attainable) on my government test. Both of my scores are WELL above the national average. This stuff just isn't taught extensively.
 
To be fair, he probably never would have had a better chance than now. His 15 minutes of fame to get easy money from unfiltered assholes trying to live vicariously through him would have passed and his opportunity with it. I highly doubt most people would have cared in the year he took to learn; another footnote in a long line of people siphoning money from the easily persuaded, reactionary alt-right.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Oz8RjPAD2Jk
 
I found that pretty dull and turned it off a few minutes in. There are better creators on the internet who will teach you about history in a more engaging way. Congrats to him on finding an audience that likes it and pays him well for it, though.

I wonder if any of the people who comment on videos like this about how "I learned more in this 20 minutes than I learned in 12 years of school" paid any attention in school or will retain any of this information by tomorrow morning. Just kidding, I know.
 
I thought it was ok, but I'm a huge history buff. The problem is there ARE things out there currently doing the same thing much better and in a more interesting way (Extra History, even History Buffs with the film angle is unique) so this is fairly bland by comparison.

I'm neutral on it for now. Will have to see more.
 
I go to one of the best public school systems in the state of Ohio. I personally believe my teachers to be incredibly intellegent individuals who are great at what they do-especially in the social science department. The third ammendment was just brushed upon in both AP (college level) classes. I passed the US history test and am on pace to get a 5 (highest score attainable) on my government test. Both of my scores are WELL above the national average. This stuff just isn't taught extensively.
So either everyone else is lying, or their experience is just different than yours. Consider the latter. Consider it regardless of how accomplished you believe you are lol
 
Not very interesting so far.

Maybe I'm spoiled by Extra History.

I thought it was ok, but I'm a huge history buff. The problem is there ARE things out there currently doing the same thing much better and in a more interesting way (Extra History, even History Buffs with the film angle is unique) so this is fairly bland by comparison.

I'm neutral on it for now. Will have to see more.

Both History Buffs and Extra History are fantastic in terms of research and presenting the historical events and figures in such a way as to make one more interested in looking into the subjects they tackle with each video. That said, I find it interesting how much attention Moriarty's (if the responses in this thread are any indication) middling debut has received thus far in comparison to the Extra History thread.
 
Both History Buffs and Extra History are fantastic in terms of research and presenting the historical events and figures in such a way as to make one more interested in looking into the subjects they tackle with each video. That said, I find it interesting how much attention Moriarty's (if the responses in this thread are any indication) middling debut has received thus far in comparison to the Extra History thread.

hey, I made that thread

im sad now
 
This... is what he wanted to do?

This was really bad, from a creative and editing perspective.

He has a ton of information with no idea how to make it engaging. Needs a top tier editor, badly.

Dude is making 40 fucking thousand a month, shouldn't be out of the question to hire someone that knows how to properly make a set, get a proper editor and a producer that can add style and flare to keep it engaging.

Do something, rooting for you Colin.
 
TBF I get and appreciate what he's trying to do aesthetically from a delivery POV. I

t's far more traditional in its approach, with no 'whizz bang info overload' graphics, ticker tapes etc, but if that is going to be the case he needs to improve his delivery and the depth on content he's providing.
 
His delivery needs work. As some have pointed out he seems more natural in a discussion based rather than instructional based system . It's his first video . Will watch next and maybe give it a month or two and recheck before I make any firm judgements .

On the idea of shift from video games to this l well free world he wants to do this he can and support himself comfortably more power to him .
 
Snooze fest.
Colin desperately needs someone to bounce off of and debate, the Kinda Funny guys were terrible when it came to standing up against him, or challenging his views. I'd be very keen in watching debating videos if he does anything of the sort, because while I agree with him on certain topics, he certainly holds views/opinions that are just plain wrong, but he's rarely ever contested.
 
I have no idea who this guy is or what he's about (outside of knowing he's controversial?) so I checked this out without lot of the baggage I assume most people have. All I can say is I wasn't impressed. Watching someone read something I'd have written before I even got into university in such a dull and dry way just isn't engaging. I certainly didn't feel like I was getting any insights I couldn't get elsewhere.

It needs a proper vocal hook like Dan Carlin's hardcore history or something more appealing. He's going for a kind of history lecturer vibe but a lot of lecturers I've had make even the boring stuff not so tedious by being good orators.
 
I'm guessing his next video will be on the two party system with a hint of "both sides."

I go to one of the best public school systems in the state of Ohio. I personally believe my teachers to be incredibly intellegent individuals who are great at what they do-especially in the social science department. The third ammendment was just brushed upon in both AP (college level) classes. I passed the US history test and am on pace to get a 5 (highest score attainable) on my government test. Both of my scores are WELL above the national average. This stuff just isn't taught extensively.

That's cool. I got a 5 on my History AP course. That doesn't change the fact that this is basic information. And most amendments are "brushed upon" there are 27 of them, it does't take a lot of brain power to do your own independent reading in your history book or hit up Wiki.
 
That title is an immediate turnoff for me. Why does this guy always manage make something so simple seem so pompous and arrogant?

I won't be watching.
 

Lol 45 minutes of talking about Atheism? And Colin putting his morality up next to others. Well this sounds like it is within context to quote Lime's post breaking down Colin's character.

You seriously don't need 45 minutes to say "People can be good without a structured faith." So I can only assume he will spend some of that time talking down on religion by highlighting wars fought in the name of religion.
 
Can't believe Moriarty has been in front of the camera before. With how drab and unenthused his delivery is, this feels like his first time. That or he wants these videos to be wheeled into grade school classrooms.

I don't know, I expected something like The Great War youtube channel or whatever. I don't know who the audience is for this type of content. Stump summed it up better than I ever could with the least amount of bias.
 
i don't care for the content but at least its better in the sense that it doesn't sound like he's reading a script the entire time

so he's listening to constructive criticism. :)
 
as someone who has no money but currently on the youtube grind with about 100x better production values, im very sad

Just court some racists and act indignant when decent people tell you that they don't appreciate that!

I wonder if his audience is disappointed with his output so far or not. Last I checked comments on his video were all "lol SJWs get BTFO" and no commentary on the actual content.
 
It's my understanding the 3rd amendment was written because during the Revolutionary War the British forces would impose themselves upon colonist's houses to stay, so when they wrote the Bill of Rights they specifically called it out.

Goes along with the "government can't randomly impose on it's citizens" kind of deal, especially with the military, but it is an oddly specific amendment. Still one that needs to exist, though, I suppose.

I'll watch the video later, interesting in seeing the rest of the story (or if my understanding is totally off base).
 
You can really see where all the money went.

And people gave Anita Sarkeesian endless shit over the budget for the Tropes vs Women series and yet from her first episode she was using 1) professional lighting equipment and 2) didn't sit in front of bookshelves of half empty liquor bottles while she spoke about her topics.
 
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