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These all have terrible endings. They might as well be, "it was all a dream."

Or was it?



I'm just glad the internet gives people a place to put these half-assed works. Otherwise the friends of these writers would be inundated with requests to read it.
Edit: They also don't have a point. No ending, no point, it's just a premise hanging out there.
 
crimzonflame said:
uh how did he write that story if he was pretending to be asleep?

I don't really get that one... It doesn't really have a good payoff or revelation at the end, we could infer the thing knew he was awake when he dragged the parents into the room.
 
SmithnCo said:
I don't really get that one... It doesn't really have a good payoff or revelation at the end, we could infer the thing knew he was awake when he dragged the parents into the room.

Maybe he is the monster?
 
About Suicide Mouse.

LOL, who the fuck would let Leonard Maltin be the guy that approves wither a old Disney cartoon gets digitized for DVD or not. Whoever wrote that doesn't even know who Leonard Maltin is.
 
mac said:
These all have terrible endings. They might as well be, "it was all a dream."

Or was it?



I'm just glad the internet gives people a place to put these half-assed works. Otherwise the friends of these writers would be inundated with requests to read it.
Edit: They also don't have a point. No ending, no point, it's just a premise hanging out there.

well I think of them as the internet-era equivalent of those scary campfire stories. Not really written to have a "point" other than to scare you or make you feel uneasy at least for a moment. Ficitonal urban legends, that kind of stuff.
 
If you enjoyed Suicide Mouse, Dead Bart's a decent rip-off of it with a bit stronger ending.

There were two that I don't remember the name of. One was about a guy who heard his dog barking and went outside to see a 10 foot figure rummaging around in the dark. It saw him, so he ran inside, and it started scratching at his windows.

Another was about a guy on a farm who found that bales of hay in his field were getting moved around at night. He moved them and stayed up to see who was doing it, to find a large creature run out of the woods and move them back. He eventually realizes that the beast is using the bales of hay to mark where it will allow the man to go.
 
ezekial45 said:
The Portraits

A long time ago, there was a man who went out hunting in the woods. As night fell, he found himself in an unfamiliar part of the forest. He walked and walked, but he couldnÂ’t find his way home. Wandering aimlessly in the dark, he eventually came to a small clearing where an old, ramshackle cabin stood. Tired and weary, he decided to see if he could stay there for the night.

When he came closer to the cabin, he saw that the door was standing ajar. Poking his head inside, he could see that the little cabin was completely empty, but there was a bed and a fire burning in the fireplace. The hunter threw himself on the bed and decided to sleep there for the night. If the owner came back, he would ask his permission in the morning.

Lying on the bed, half-asleep, he looked around and was surprised to see the walls were covered with paintings. They appeared to be family portraits, all framed and painted in incredible detail. They seemed very life-like and, without exception, each family portrait was uglier than the next. The hideous faces in the paintings made him incredibly uneasy. The way they were painted made it seem as if the eyes were staring directly at him. It was incredibly unnerving.

He decided that the only way he was going to get any sleep was to ignore the hideous faces staring at him. So he turned on his side, facing the wall, pulled the blanket over his head and drifted off to sleep.

In the morning, the hunter woke up to find the cabin bathed in sunlight. When he looked up, he discovered there were no family portraits on the walls of the cabin, only windows.
This is the best one, in my opinion.
 
Lionel Mandrake said:
If you enjoyed Suicide Mouse, Dead Bart's a decent rip-off of it with a bit stronger ending.

There were two that I don't remember the name of. One was about a guy who heard his dog barking and went outside to see a 10 foot figure rummaging around in the dark. It saw him, so he ran inside, and it started scratching at his windows.

Another was about a guy on a farm who found that bales of hay in his field were getting moved around at night. He moved them and stayed up to see who was doing it, to find a large creature run out of the woods and move them back. He eventually realizes that the beast is using the bales of hay to mark where it will allow the man to go.

Lame, I was hoping that it was Kenshiro in the bales of hay.
 
Jokergrin said:
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Let's stick to the true topic here.

Oh my GOD!

That is some creepy ass pasta.
 
I used to live in one of those shared buildings: one that has multiple bedrooms and bathrooms, but a shared living area. At the time of this incident, I lived there with three other people: a mother and her grown son, who shared one part of the living area, and the typical middle aged grizzled veteran guy who had the other one. Most of the time, we didn't interact: I and the mom had jobs at separate ends of town, and the kid apparently helped people move and do chores for cash. The old veteran guy stayed home a lot and ate baked beans.
Now, let me get this straight when I say this guy LOVED baked beans. He had them for every meal: usually a can of Busch's, with some other thing, usually a bit of whatever the mom made, though if the mom and son went out to eat, this guy would just have an entire pot of baked beans. I'm sure he had horrible gas, but I never managed to smell it (which was fine by me). He bought the beans on his own pay, so nobody ever complained about it either.
At this time I was a huge fan of MMORPGs, so I would often stay up all odd hours of the night playing them. This particular night, I was talking to some of my online buddies. I don't remember the circumstances around it, but I do remember talking to them about scary stories. As we were telling them, I began hearing creaks and groans in the house. No big deal; this was an old house. It still creeped me out though, and I kept telling my mates to knock it off. They did, eventually, but soon after I heard the call of nature. To get to the bathroom allotted to me, I would have to go down the hallway, through the shared area, to the other hallway and the bathroom. Normally no problem, but it was dark and scary out there. (Yeah, I know, I'm a wuss.)
Eventually I worked up the courage to avoid pissing my pants and go. I opened the door and left it open so I could use the glow of my computer as light. I walked down the hallway as fast as I could go without going into a full out run, and made my way through the shared space into the bathroom without consequence. I did my duty, then flushed the toilet. When it was done, I realized the house seemed eerily quiet compared to before my trip. Still, I washed my hands and made my way back out.
This time, I was slightly more relaxed as I was walking, though it didn't last long, as I almost shrieked when my foot landed in something wet and sticky as I walked through the shared area. I stopped myself from screaming when I realized that it was probably just a spilled can of baked beans that the veteran guy had left open on the counter. I had probably knocked it over while running to the bathroom. Without even thinking, I grabbed a couple paper towels and mopped up as much of the mess as I could see from the glow of my computer. When that was done, I went back to my room.
As soon as I sat down, I noticed the game had logged me out, which was weird since I was sure I hadn't taken that long. I logged back in to find myself greeted by at least a thousand frantic whispers, asking me if I was all right, what had happened, ect. I wasn't sure what they were talking about until somebody sent me a log of my whispers to various mates. All of them detailed gruesome, vicious murders, suicides, and other nasty, horrible things, some that still make me shudder when I consider that some human mind must've come up with them. All of these whispers were sent while I was in the bathroom. I couldn't find any explanation for them, seeing as I KNEW everybody else was in bed. It took two hours for my mates to finally calm me down, I didn't think I could get to sleep but I guess my body eventually drifted off from exhaustion.
I woke up the next morning to policemen banging on my door. Apparently, during the night, somebody had broken into the house through a window accidentally left open, and taken an ax to the mother and her son. They had then dragged the two corpses to the window, and left. I was horrified to see the bloody paper towels in the trash can, and then went into nervous panic attacks when a crime scene analyst began detailing how the murders could have happened. I don't remember his entire speech in detail, but I do remember one part, which he told to me directly.
"Here, this is where you mopped up the blood. But this spot here, see this stain? This indicates that he kept the bodies here for a good while, almost as if he stood here for a long moment, watching something..."
 
Humper-Monkey's Ghost Story

That was one posted in the creepy/paranormal thread awhile back and I really enjoyed it. It's a long one, but I thought it was worth the read. It's a story about a young delinquent turned solder stationed at a (nearly) abandoned US Military base in Germany in the 80s.
 
The "lost episode" and all its various permutations always strike a creepy chord within me. Which is ironic, because I find them to be universally poorly written and mostly stupid.

It does give me inspiration for a real-life "Game that seems normal then gets progressively more fucked up" based off recurring nightmares I have that I'd like to do for iOS. 'Cept I have no programming experience or artistic ability.
 
Well I personally enjoy reading these types of stories (it helps having a very vivid imagination!), but one thing that annoys me the most about many of them, is that they just HAVE to throw in something that is in some way supernatural. Like Squidward's Suicide is pretty creepy, but when you throw in things like

The unsettling part is at this point there is no sound. Literally no sound. Not even the feedback from the speakers in the room.

The eerie part is this sound, and Squidward's sobbing, sounded real, as if the sound wasn't coming from the speakers but as if the speakers were holes the sound was coming through from the other side.

If you just leave these parts out, it becomes more believable, as far as believable goes for these types of stories.
 
"Missing episodes" are some of my least favorite, aside from some good ones (like Squidward's Suicide) it's just overdone and almost always the same.

Although the Family Guy one (about Seth's assistant) is very well done, especially if you can find it attached with the mural of the violent FG scenes.
 
I remember one particularly amusing story on the net that I can't seem to source. It's about a video game that, running off a floppy disc, deletes itself and can never be played again upon the player's loss. Thus, the game is so rare that historians own the last copies but cannot study them and unlock *all* of the secrets because playing it 100% means it will be undoubtedly be lost forever. The game itself is based in some kind of historical myth, with the choice of two characters. One is a physically strong warrior that can win the game easily, but the other is more agile and weaker. I probably got the facts wrong, but I thought the myth aspect and the desire to use the impossible character, destroying the game, was very cool.


Ed: inuscreepystuff.blogspot.com/2010/08/killswitch.html It turns out I mixed it up all wrong.
 
haha that suicidemouse story is ridiculous. I bet there are so many people who choose to believe it too.

Enjoying these on my laptop at bed at 4:35 am, oh shit......
 
This one is my favorite :

John Stalvern waited. The lights above him blinked and sparked out of the air. There were demons in the base. He didn't see them, but had expected them now for years. His warnings to Cernel Joson were not listenend to and now it was too late. Far too late for now, anyway.
John was a space marine for fourteen years. When he was young he watched the spaceships and he said to dad "I want to be on the ships daddy."
Dad said "No! You will BE KILL BY DEMONS"
There was a time when he believed him. Then as he got oldered he stopped. But now in the space station base of the UAC he knew there were demons.
"This is Joson" the radio crackered. "You must fight the demons!"
So John gotted his palsma rifle and blew up the wall.
"HE GOING TO KILL US" said the demons
"I will shoot at him" said the cyberdemon and he fired the rocket missiles. John plasmaed at him and tried to blew him up. But then the ceiling fell and they were trapped and not able to kill.
"No! I must kill the demons" he shouted
The radio said "No, John. You are the demons"
And then John was a zombie.
 
confused said:
This one is my favorite :

John Stalvern waited. The lights above him blinked and sparked out of the air. There were demons in the base. He didn't see them, but had expected them now for years. His warnings to Cernel Joson were not listenend to and now it was too late. Far too late for now, anyway.
John was a space marine for fourteen years. When he was young he watched the spaceships and he said to dad "I want to be on the ships daddy."
Dad said "No! You will BE KILL BY DEMONS"
There was a time when he believed him. Then as he got oldered he stopped. But now in the space station base of the UAC he knew there were demons.
"This is Joson" the radio crackered. "You must fight the demons!"
So John gotted his palsma rifle and blew up the wall.
"HE GOING TO KILL US" said the demons
"I will shoot at him" said the cyberdemon and he fired the rocket missiles. John plasmaed at him and tried to blew him up. But then the ceiling fell and they were trapped and not able to kill.
"No! I must kill the demons" he shouted
The radio said "No, John. You are the demons"
And then John was a zombie.

Was that Doom fanfic? That and the Half Life Full Life Consequences things were amazing
 
Flying_Phoenix said:
long story with beans

I don't really get that one. Did the killer come in, kill those two, dragged the bodies through the shared room and when he went to the toilet played with his computer?

Where's the bean guy? Or is he the killer? What was important about the fact he ate beans?
 
Mike M said:
It does give me inspiration for a real-life "Game that seems normal then gets progressively more fucked up" based off recurring nightmares I have that I'd like to do for iOS. 'Cept I have no programming experience or artistic ability.

I would kill to play a game that is all kinds of David Lynch fucked up. Like that "The Theatre" game only not glitchy and with modern production values.
 
Tence said:
Where's the bean guy? Or is he the killer? What was important about the fact he ate beans?

So the
poor
writer could use the "spilled beans" as a reason why the guy didn't check what kind of sticky thing got under his shoes! Clever writing!
 
And to people complaining about the "I know you're awake" pasta, it obviously doesn't make sense if you consider the author to be the narrator. But that's true with almost all first person fiction.

Nevertheless, I like to tell that one. It's a big hit when it's told around campfires and such.
 
Read the monkey military ghost one. Very long, quite excellent.

Thought tulpa was a great read too.

The one about contact lens reminded me of the alba horror movie/thai ghost story it was based off on the cornea transplant.

Thanks for the link OP, quite good/fun reading
 
sw33tclyde said:
Humper-Monkey's Ghost Story

That was one posted in the creepy/paranormal thread awhile back and I really enjoyed it. It's a long one, but I thought it was worth the read. It's a story about a young delinquent turned solder stationed at a (nearly) abandoned US Military base in Germany in the 80s.

I read the first five chapters then decided to see how many chapters there were. After being overwhelmed I just skipped to the last chapter.

Very good but its practically a book.
 
So guys, here is a creepypasta I've seen around lately.

Nintendo once had a special conference. During this conference they showed off a lot of their titles such as Super Mario Land 3D and Mario Kart 7. People were all in awe and excited. Then came the point where Nintendo was showing off Animal Crossing. Things seemed normal until the screen suddenly changed to black and white. Up came a horrific looking couple that looked much like the Mii's you see on the Wii. They were hideous. During this supposed segment of the conference a montage of the Mii couples lives were shown such as them in the park and getting married. The background was often blurry and bright as the viewers could barely make out what was going on in the background. The strangest part was that the same montages kept playing over and over again over a background of strangely upbeat music. After three minutes the conference returned to normal and the two Miis were never shown again.
 
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