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I think the main beef I have is the inconsistency of when his grandma died. In the first chapter it seems like she died when he was in high school, but later he makes references to it happening before he was 6. Maybe I'm reading it wrong.
 
PigSpeakers said:
I think the main beef I have is the inconsistency of when his grandma died. In the first chapter it seems like she died when he was in high school, but later he makes references to it happening before he was 6. Maybe I'm reading it wrong.
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He definitely mentions it happening when he was a junior. And he later references it during the main storyline which seems to take place between ages 6-7.

The thing is, as a narrator his sense of time and relation of his story is very jumpy and unreliable. He speaks about things happening out of order or randomly injects dream sequences in between the regular events. So this could all be something he is relaying at a later age.

Other evidence for this comes from the fact that he talks about trying to bury and smash the snoopy dog which has not had reference since. He also says it was sitting on the dresser in his parent's room the day his father died, which also didn't happen or has not happened yet.

I've searched all over for other references on the web of onewhitewhisker to no avail, I wish we had more information of who uploaded it because the story doesn't feel finished.

EDIT:

Seems he/she is a goon.

I've found a few links that show OneWhiteWhisker is a member of SomethingAwful forums and that may be where his story originated.
 
Sorry to double-post, but there is definitely more to the OneWhiteWhisker series of stories than what is posted on Creepypasta wiki.

Just going off OneWhiteWhisker's posts in this link alone:
http://forums.somethingawful.com/showthread.php?threadid=3472214

Show a continence to the story that goes beyond where it's left off in the creepypasta wiki. I'm still trying to figure out how to find all of his posts and collect them together to continue the story, but it may require registration and purchase of an SA account to see archived threads.
 
demidar said:
Most creepypastas I've read are good in the first half, then shit the bed in the second half because they self-insert. Like "Now I am the monster! Booga booga booga!". The ones that start off in first-person are fine though.

The one I like the most is about a some C64 game (I think) being swapped around during computer meetups (before the Internet made everything so easy) that had unknown origins. It was great because it wasn't really supernatural and nothing bad happened to the author, it was presented very nonchalantly and matter-of-factually which makes it unnerving and believable.
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Do you have a link to it?
 
Jackben said:
Sorry to double-post, but there is definitely more to the OneWhiteWhisker series of stories than what is posted on Creepypasta wiki.

Just going off OneWhiteWhisker's posts in this link alone:
http://forums.somethingawful.com/showthread.php?threadid=3472214

Show a continence to the story that goes beyond where it's left off in the creepypasta wiki. I'm still trying to figure out how to find all of his posts and collect them together to continue the story, but it may require registration and purchase of an SA account to see archived threads.
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Yeah, looking through there, he made up to part 24. I don't have an SA account unfortunately.
 
Demon Lizardman said:
Also, this one is worth reading as well
http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Funnymouth
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Goddamnit, I'm so sick of reading long creepy pastas only to be disappointed by the ending..
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PigSpeakers said:
Yeah, looking through there, he made up to part 24. I don't have an SA account unfortunately.
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Demon Lizardman said:
Well fuck, I am not bothering with purchasing an account just for the rest of the story.
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I've actually been meaning to get one for a while. I might do so this weekend and see what I can to patch together next week when I have access to the archives (with Whisker's permission ofc).

I'll keep creepy-pasta-GAF updated regarding my findings if I'm able to get a project going after purchasing the archives upgrade.
 
Dynamite Ringo Matsuri said:
Is this the entirety of the OneWhiteWhisker saga? That one sounds interesting from yours and Jack's posts and I'd like to read it from the beginning in one place if possible
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That's the most of what has been found thanks to PigSpeakers efforts to order the stories and find the latest link which has the most content to modern day.

Just quickly scrolling through, I have a feeling the story isn't finished even to this day. It's likely still a work in progress.
 
Jackben said:
That's the most of what has been found thanks to PigSpeakers efforts to order the stories and find the latest link which has the most content to modern day.

Just quickly scrolling through, I have a feeling the story isn't finished even to this day. It's likely still a work in progress.
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But it's still fictional right?
 
Demon Lizardman said:
But it's still fictional right?
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The way One White Whisker posts about it makes it seem more autobiographical with fictional elements...obviously the reality in which a maelific and omnescient snoopy doll exists is unlikely but some of the actual events which take place are so intensely described that I would not be surprised if they were real.

Spoiler examples [covers just the content linked in PigSpeaker's original post]:

his mother's beatings, catching his parents having sex. the child abuse via the aunt, killing the litter of kittens, stuff that happens with his friends and sister etc.
 
Subtle said:
Seems pretty straight forward to me if you read it all. What's confusing you?
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The murderer seemed to have a fixation on the guy but after a while he got his friend but still was fixiated in the protagonist so he killed the guy's sister... and at the end he wanted to die with the friend and not the protagonist.?
 
demidar said:
Most creepypastas I've read are good in the first half, then shit the bed in the second half because they self-insert. Like "Now I am the monster! Booga booga booga!". The ones that start off in first-person are fine though.

The one I like the most is about a some C64 game (I think) being swapped around during computer meetups (before the Internet made everything so easy) that had unknown origins. It was great because it wasn't really supernatural and nothing bad happened to the author, it was presented very nonchalantly and matter-of-factually which makes it unnerving and believable.
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Pale Luna! This is one of my favorites because it's so plausible.
 
I hate to self promote (no I don't), but I shot a creepy pasta last month. We're just wrapping up FX on it right now...

Here's a couple of stills from behind the scenes:

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In case you're wondering which one, it's for WHITE WITH RED. A personal favorite.
 
oatmeal said:
I hate to self promote (no I don't), but I shot a creepy pasta last month. We're just wrapping up FX on it right now...

Here's a couple of stills from behind the scenes:
In case you're wondering which one, it's for WHITE WITH RED. A personal favorite.
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I remember that one. Good choice.
 
Ahasverus said:
The murderer seemed to have a fixation on the guy but after a while he got his friend but still was fixiated in the protagonist so he killed the guy's sister... and at the end he wanted to die with the friend and not the protagonist.?
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The story gets convoluted at that point. Josh is found when the protagonist is 15, a few months before he meets Veronica. Veronica is caught up in a hit and run and loses her life. The random texts after her death is sloppy writing as the murderer had been dead for months at that point.
 
ZaCH3000 said:
The story gets convoluted at that point. Josh is found when the protagonist is 15, a few months before he meets Veronica. Veronica is caught up in a hit and run and loses her life. The random texts after her death is sloppy writing as the murderer had been dead for months at that point.
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That one came across as a misinterpretation or an error.... I found myself trying to make sense of it, but what I got was:

Penpal spoilers:
- Protagonist puts the note on the balloon and gets an admirer (5)
- Admirer starts taking pictures (5)
- Admirer starts sneaking in and "moving" him, including one night putting a note on the pillow and leaving him in the woods (no idea why...) (6)
- Josh + Protag go to make maps, admirer takes shirt, leaves picture (marked 15/16, can't really tell why, maybe age?), kills Mrs. Maggie (?). (6?)
- Mom finds food/blanket under house, protagonist moves
- Boxes goes missing, walkie-talkie gets lost (10)
- Josh comes over for birthday party. (12)
- Josh is abducted (?).
- Starts meeting Veronica, she is killed (15)
- Josh's mom goes crazy from loss of both kids, dad takes jobs, finds Josh (who has been dead for a month or so, but was kept/tortured for 2+ years)
 
ZaCH3000 said:
The story gets convoluted at that point. Josh is found when the protagonist is 15, a few months before he meets Veronica. Veronica is caught up in a hit and run and loses her life. The random texts after her death is sloppy writing as the murderer had been dead for months at that point.
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Let me get this. Josh was kidnapped by the stalker for what exactly? To attract the protagonist? And the part you say about the murder being after josh death is incorrect, as the protagonists asks veronica about her and when josh is found the father says his wife will killl herself as she's already crazy because of veronica.
 
RedStep said:
That one came across as a misinterpretation or an error.... I found myself trying to make sense of it, but what I got was:

Penpal spoilers:
- Protagonist puts the note on the balloon and gets an admirer (5)
- Admirer starts taking pictures (5)
- Admirer starts sneaking in and "moving" him, including one night putting a note on the pillow and leaving him in the woods (no idea why...) (6)
- Josh + Protag go to make maps, admirer takes shirt, leaves picture (marked 15/16, can't really tell why, maybe age?), kills Mrs. Maggie (?). (6?)
- Mom finds food/blanket under house, protagonist moves
- Boxes goes missing, walkie-talkie gets lost (10)
- Josh comes over for birthday party. (12)
- Josh is abducted (?).
- Starts meeting Veronica, she is killed (15)
- Josh's mom goes crazy from loss of both kids, dad takes jobs, finds Josh (who has been dead for a month or so, but was kept/tortured for 2+ years)
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That's how I thought it went...

I bought the book and I enjoyed the original reddit thread more. I thought he fleshed out things too much, even though he really didn't do too much...I think. Fuck, I can't remember the original.
 
Didn't there used to be a creepy-GAF thread? And I mean actual creepy, one where people posted scary pictures, stories, videos and games, not the mouth-breathers who worship underage girls.
 
Jackben said:
Didn't there used to be a creepy-GAF thread? And I mean actual creepy, one where people posted scary pictures, stories, videos and games, not the mouth-breathers who worship underage girls.
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Now that's uncalled for, and the thread died due to inactivity.
 
demidar said:
Now that's uncalled for, and the thread died due to inactivity.
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I guess calling them **the otherwise completely well-adjusted individuals who just so happen to obsessively watch television with pre-teen actresses while salivating over suggestive images of said actresses**-GAF would be too much of a mouthful.

Actually this has given me an interesting idea for a creepy pasta.
 
Pretty much the only normal creepypasta that ever got me was

http://bestcreepypasta.blogspot.com/2009/12/cabin.html

It manages to be unnerving without being over the top.

While it's not a creepy pasta per se, Instruction For a Help is really well done.


Excerpt:

Welcome to your The Bodie! You are a human!



HOORAY.

Human is ninth most advanced The Bodie on planet. Advanced brain allow machine use. Advanced circulatory system mean you freeze to death slowly. Clever and handsome by all account.

You are!

Must remember each human unique. Each human different.

You are different from mommy. Mommy is different from her mommy.

You are NOT NOT NOT part of interconnected consciousness in which each human is like unto cell in a body and does not share autonomous function. This is mistake thinking!!!! A human die all experience die.

Human The Bodie is wonderful thing. It is is made from MEAT.


Did you know most thing not a meat? Most thing is a plant.

Plant get along just fine. Bacteria just fine too. Fungus fine. They don't need meat. Meat take so much energy. Not even use sun directly, it feed on sun in plant and other meat. The slow fall.

If you could be a plant you could take your food all the time into your The Bodie and not even waste any time. Instead you have THE MOUTHS.

Feeding ALL THESE MOUTHS take a lot of work. Trucks got to go. Boats got to go. Lesser plant get eat and turned into other thing. It exhausts. It exhausts. Mans do most work.

So many different type of food do you eat. You need a lot of food to make a good meat. Do not want bad meat or sad meat.
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http://www.somethingawful.com/series/instruction-for-a-help/
 
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