Scribble: I liked the story, and the unedited look of it was actually pretty interesting, sort of a work in progress, but I can't imagine it would have taken much more than a read through to polish out some harsh edges. I agree with Cyan that the merchant and his morals could use some elaborating. The beast did not know what morals were, but did the animals? The merchant eating the animals seems himself seem enough to question him, but was there something more that made the animals turn on him?
ronito: ronito delivers another bleak portrait of corporate life. You should get out of that world, man, otherwise I fear you will die slowly on the inside. The early submission date and the uncharacteristic errors in the text lead me to believe you did not take much time editing the piece, but it was nonetheless effective, and with a glimmer of hope at the end. I did wonder though, are brief cases that house design documents built like tanks, or why didn't the old man just smash the lock?
Tragicomedy: This had some nice writing, and I could see this being used in a larger whole later on. As it is it feels like a fragment, which isn't necessarily a bad thing, but its power depends a lot on the reader's ability to relate with the sentiments presented.
ZeroRay: Personally I don't see how anyone could choose Twilight Sparkle over Fluttershy, but beside that it was a charming story that despite its title did not come across as judgemental. It was brief, but it had an apt voice and I could see it becoming a nice portrait of lonely people brought together by something peculiar, in this case ponies.
Bootaaay: As usual very nice prose, but I feel your way of describing Aidan's emotions to Shane's house and their childhoods may have done a disservice to the story. I didn't get the sense of nostalgia and loss typical to such a situation, but that there was something more you wanted to keep in the background for the time being. As a result Aidan and Shane did not just feel estranged friends, but that something significant caused them to drift apart. To the end I expected some kind of a revelation that would explain their relationship and the suicide. Of course this might be me reading too much into things, and no one else will feel the same.
Dragoon En Regalia: This had a lot of nice parts, but I must confess I had a bit of trouble following the narrative. I accept that it was probably a stylistic choice to give it a chaotic feel, but I didn't really have anything to grab hold of. My being unfamiliar with such a setting might have been the primary cause of not getting into it at the start.
Tangent: If we go by the typical word count assigned to pictures, you were about 12,000 over the limit for the challenge, but this was a sweet story well presented, though I'm not sure how sweet the aftermath will be: a chick's ability to deal with such prolonged stress much be rather limited. After all, the signs of physical deterioration were already present in the story. I assume the inspiration was The Little Red Hen, and it's an interesting reversal of theme: in this case the one who did all the work gets to enjoy none of the results, but also asked for no help in the first place. Had the chick asked, she would have been reminded of her allergy, and the bread would not have been made owing to her selfish attitude, which leads to some questions: is it tragic or educational that the chick's efforts were wasted from a selfish point of view? Whatever the causes may have been, the resulting bread is almost certainly a good thing, so where did the mistake, either the chick's or the animals', occur, or was there even a mistake? Is the solution altruism?