Steriletom - The World Turned Upside Down: First story I read, and what a way to kick things off. America vs The World is a fascinating concept, and a scary thought. World wins, we'd lose a fantastic country. America wins and that's all there is left. You told the story of the war well, and although it was a brief recap I really bought into the history and how it unravelled.
Aaron - Burned in a Box: You successfully created an unsettling world with characters I found despicable due to their primary goals and ethics of war, violence and destruction. For some reason I kept losing the plot, not following the gravitas of the China-Russia war and the involvement of the magician. The plot seemed like a well-written B movie, which is either on the nose or an insult. I hope it's not the latter because it wasn't intended to be.
CoffeeExpress - Hoi-Polloi: You got your point across very well, I really felt the tedium of the character's working life. The story did feel like too much of a rant and too little plot, but you nailed the 'boxed in' theme.
toddhunter - Just a Box: Either I'm really stupid or you're really smart or somewhere in the middle, because keeping up with that was an absolute mindfuck.
SquiddyBiscuit - For Thou Is But One: Brief but beautifully written. You're probably far too literate and literary to require feedback from me. Just felt a bit of a shame that such a talented writer didn't submit something a bit lengthier and more involving.
Cyan - The Chinese Room: I like these sort of stories, be they literature or games or film/TV. All-out mystery, with no explanation, no firm rooting in a fantasy or real world. Is it sinister? Helpful? Who knows. Unfortunately I felt the mundane routine the character went through daily dominated the plot so much that it was a trudge to read. Interesting, but not enjoyable. And yet I felt it was well written, clever and made me think.
Bootaaay - The Thaw: I think you were in my top three last month and you've impressed me again. I instantly bought into the feud, although I felt it could have been fleshed out a little more as to how and why the land changed hands. Maybe some clarity as to why Agamer was so reviled. But I liked that he did the right thing and was disappointed when he found Tevan's family perished, and I hated them for their bitterness. So I guess I invested emotions in it. And I really, really felt the cold you described.
Tangent - Laughing at What You Can: Maybe it's ignorance on my part but some of the cultural aspects such as the cuisine went over my head, but I liked the insight into the family. I think the characters could have been more fleshed out because I saw snippets of traits and relationships but didn't get absorbed by them. You have a nice writing style though.
Mike M - The Living Situation: Did I read somewhere here that this was non-fiction, autobiographical? Wow, what a scenario. As a father I felt heartbroken reading about the kid. The prompt was well explored and as someone who likes my space and my own home I really understood it.
Nezumi - Refreshments: Your writing style is really fun and bouncy. It makes me smile. Can I ask - and be honest - was this a holdover from the last challenge? Because there seemed to be great debate and absurdity, and certainly seemed to apply more to those themes than 'boxed in'.
Sober - Just a Small Town Girl: Without being condescending I saw a lot of evidence of inexperienced writing, such as fluctuating pace and some poor sentence structure, but I liked the plot. It resonated with me because I went to university to escape my little seaside resort corner of the world and it really opened my eyes. Writing just needs to be a little tighter and more controlled but it was a good story.
Ashes - the lows you cast are nowhere near: Disclaimer, and an apology; I know nothing about poetry. It doesn't strike me, never has. I'll never be able to respond to poetry appropriately. I barely know what is or isn't good poetry, though this seems to be.
1. Steriletom - Addressed prompt well and story was dramatic.
2. Sober - Not the best-written story but I identified with the good plot.
3. Bootaay - Unapologetically depressing, little to actually cheer her, but that cold and unforgiving world and the struggles of the characters was probably the best delivery of this batch of contributions.
HMs: (genuinely could have been on the podium, had to think long and hard) Cyan, Mike M