Feedback and Voting Time!
Mike M -- Boeing Woes:
I think the problem I had was that the whole punchline with the one writing the letter being a gremlin doesn't come across very well. I honestly didn't catch it the first time I read it because the part before that had me lulled in a bit. After I read your own critic of your piece I went like."Wow! What? Gremlin?" I read it again this time reading more carefully. I think the first time I thought that the gremlin in the short description box was just a name for low workers or something like that... that being said it is hard for me to tell if that part should have been written a bit more obvious or if it is entirely my fault for being an unobservant reader. The idea however is
really neat and I like the effort you put into that layout
John Dunbar -- In a Field Where Barley Grows:
I nice and dark fairytail. I was a bit confused though as to what happend to Gwendoline. Did the Scarecrow kill her in a former life? Though after what happend with MikeM's story it might just be that it is the official "Nezumi can't read week". Was kind of sad the cat did not return to life. I love cats.
SquiddyBiscuit -- From Carthage then I left:
I always have some trouble giving feedback on SciFi stuff because it I'm just not a fan of the genre in general. I do think that you did a good job building your world though and the writing was good aswell. At first I was a bit put off by all the Es and the eirs. I thought that was confusing though probably appropriate for a race so different from humans.
Ashes1396 -- Anonymous donor:
You do like your unconventional formats, don't you?
I have to agree with MikeM though that highlighting the names in a way might have helped the readability of the piece. Other than that I enjoyed it, though I thought that Anna was behaving somewhat odd. I mean really, what would have been so bad about telling the husband that she had been of the pill for a year if he was the one who wanted children in the first place? I also wasn't sure who picked up the child in the end.
Tangent -- Monster Within:
Going from the title of the piece I guess that there were no monsters and they are just part of the stones imagination? That made me wonder if his whole conversation with the seagull was actually just a fiction he invinted himself to overcome the loneliness of, well, being a stone. I'm not sure about that though so. If not I think that I would have liked it better if only the seagull or only the stone would have talked in Haiku to further emphasize the difference between the two unlikely friends.
Cyan -- Shadow Fragments:
I have to hand it to you I'm normally not a fan of super short fiction but I really liked this. It was like a poem without the "poemness". And even though it was that short, the few lines that were actually there managed to captivate me.
Chainsawkitten -- Reflections of a Budding Flower
Uh, creppy! Very well written even though it did take me a while to get into it. But since I already established the "Nezumi can't read week" I'm pretty sure that was all me. Great first entry and intersting interpretation of the theme. looking forward to read more from you.
Votes:
Hm... I really have trouble deciding. I fell like I have three second places since I can't find anything that places one story over or under the others...
1.)John Dunbar
2.) Chainsawkitten
3.)Cyan