Oh right, I promised comments:
Baby Shoes - Damn, that title primed me for the ending but it still got me.
The City You Once Loved - Got a very etheral, dreamlike quality out of that, which I liked.
Divine Protection - Nice, fun story. The harp gag was a bit out of left field even if he threw it from the start of the story. I guess divine harps don't give a shit about adhering to linear time.
Fakir and the Prince - Really liked the moments between him and Benov by the end. Would be curious where it might go from there, or if there are more moments of prince-as-commoner worth exploring.
For the Want of a Dream - There's a lot, perhaps too much detail and it's hard to tell because it's scattered between the author showing it and some that your character sees. The former is tricky because a lot of it seems extraneous at times and doesn't lend to what your character sees (in which case it's not really important to him) or the story to make it important enough to tell us about it.
God Forsaken - Rather like the prose, but it gets a little off. Got a hold of it on a re-read but a little cleaning up will fix flow and pacing, I think.
Hexenjäger - Very fun story, liked the setup and the little twist at the end. Having the hunter be such a gentlemen was a touch I liked.
Lonely Planet - Really cool story, liked the imagery of the forest twisting and reshaping itself as we delve into Mino's thoughts.
Nameless - Nice fairy tale and the vignettes of him overcoming different fears, but the ending was a bit out there and unexplained. Are the woman and child related to the M/C then? He needed to cross over to go home or something?
No One - Interesting poem. Wish I was a bit more knowledgeable about how to comment on a poem, but it was good.
Still Creek - Creepy and unsettling but not sure if you had more in mind you couldn't fit in. Guess the smuggler guy was real but why waste a shot on someone without a weapon? The girlfriend disappearing could use some explanation too.
Swashbuckled - Fun pirate story. Not too sure about the dialogue; it got what was needed but occasionally felt a bit inconsistent at times even when it was clear who was speaking, to me it felt like the characters switched tones throughout.
Things that make my heart beat faster but not in a horror kind of way. - Sweet story, although not too sure an 11-year old would know how to jerk off so soon.
Ties that Bind - Absurd is interesting, but I sadly didn't really enjoy it as much.
Where's the fun in that? - Interesting twist on the Groundhog Day formula. 20 years is a bit of a long time, I'm surprised to see where it could've gone or if the M/C had tried to change everything and how the universe course corrects anyway.
White Light - Lacks a bit of polish. Some sentences go on, or are unclear at times. Try another pass or reading it aloud to see where you can clean it up.
Yes, people knew it was me, even after I revised this thing daily for a week and a half to scrub it of every trace of five dollar words and purple prose--not in any attempt to disguise my entry, but just a genuine attempt to incorporate a 16 months of feedback and curb my bad writing habits to produce something more readable.
And what gave me away? "Bereft?" From the man who uses words like "depilated," "phrenetic," "thanomaturgist," and "bifurcated," fucking
"bereft" is the tip off?
Are you kidding me?! This story is now a metaphor for my word choices stabbing you all through the heart!
Seriously though, it's an interesting thing to be so readily identifiable to some people, because if I have a particular "style," I'm not aware of it. Outside of maybe a penchant for writing condescending intellectual types... And picking obscure-ish words as my titles...
Personally, I am not a fan of purple prose or the overuse of 5$, 10$ words (though I'm guilty of catching myself using them occasionally). I don't mind if you are trying to write for us for the challenges, I just hope you aren't completely trying to stamp out that style; if you enjoy that style by all means keep writing like that.
Thanks to Azih for my one, single, solitary vote. Glad someone enjoyed it.
I'll still try to post some individual critiques soon but here's a few general points:
* How writers interpret and incorporate the theme is the most important factor when I judge a story. Anyone can write any short story but the ability to be successfully prompted by a word and thrive within that restriction is impressive.
Too many stories here seemed to ignore the theme or shoehorn it as a second thought. Just short of a handful bore little relevance to the theme at all. For me, it doesn't matter how good an entry is, if the theme is addressed poorly I disqualify it from consideration.
* Second person narrative isn't my cup tea, and we had several here. I hate being told that I'm doing this or saying that. It rarely reads better than first- or third-party.
* I don't cope very well with a deluge of abstract, floaty, wordy stories. They are technically impressive and boat wide vocabularies and striking visual images but too often they come across as a literary flexing of muscles, especially when I leave the story with no lasting sense of a plot or character. Personal preference, perhaps.
* I'm starting to notice that the challenges are developing certain tropes which are making some stories feel samey. Stories set in the afterlife or in a little fantasy village are ten a penny around here. I guess it's because it's easier to write those due the lack of real life boundaries.
* Congratulations Mike M!
I feel like even when we use the word 'theme', it feels more like a prompt rather than a theme (both in the way the 'rules' say we can interpret it how we wish, and because some challenges don't really have themes). Personally I look to see how they interpreted the prompt, but that's only a small factor even still.
I do have to ask, because I did write one of the second-person narrative stories. I'm fairly new at trying them. I did enjoy the other one that Branduil wrote, but - personal preference coming up - I think 2nd person really works better in the present tense. Detail is definitely tougher to come up with in 2nd person. I try to aim so it can accommodate male/female readers but I think that sometimes limits what I can do. Still not too sold even when I write in 2nd person and I refer to the reader's past. There's just something though about it, even if you don't feel like being told what you're doing, I'm going to make you do it anyway, and how you feel afterwards is all up the reader, I guess. But then it means I might have to be more broad about certain things to illicit a better response.
If anyone wants to jump in and defend 2nd person, go right ahead