Here's comments for the first few. Will have the rest in the morning. My eye's are about to fall off they're so tire...
Whateverittkaes- Harmony's Discord: I like the big spin where her she is the product of a political marriage. It was the most interesting thing in this entire story for me. Though, i think the set up to it was a little lacking. There wasn't much before that was really grabbing me. It seemed mostly like a "rich girl becomes apathetic from having too much" kind of story, and still kind of was. Tolkein is an interesting literary choice, but I think something like "Little Dorrit" which is about literally born in a debtors prison, would be a better choice. Incidentally, that's my favorite Dickens novel, so obviously I recommend it.
Mike C- The Sea Bride: This was really good. I felt it made the most of the word limit for a lot of turns. Wondering what you cut? Because besides just tremendous amounts of fat, this is pretty tight. Anything involving the queen? I have mixed feelings about her being an unknown. I like how we never see her, only hearing about her in whispers, but I felt there should have been more whispers. You give just enough pieces to figure out she's a sire, but i am still tremendously curious about her.
Tanzih- Overlook: A lot of this worked for me. Mostly the setting. I've always liked museums, and they're not settings you see often. Especially the more business side of museums. Also, the notion of upper management thinking they know what's up but they don't has always appealed to me. Pacing in the beginning feels a little weird to me. I liked the examining in the beginning, and the board meeting was where I really got interested, but it was Sylvan kind of sudden introduction that threw me off. Especially since he's just a 'janitor.' He's the lynchpin of the plot, and when he's introduced the story kind of becomes about him, and I don't know, something about the shift from "Museum with problems" to "Multi sensory exhibits" was a little jarring. Not to say I didn't really like both aspects.
Ashcat- Aperture: At first I really liked this. Haunted house. Parallel stories with only a slight semblance of connection. Antagonistic silverware. all the elements were really jiving with me, but they didn't seem to connect. They did kind of loosely, but it didn't feel significant for five thousand words of travel. That said, I did love both sides of the story, especially that haunted house. Everything happening in it felt imaginative, and the little mysteries within it really had me wondering where the story was going. And the side b stuff was great for it's own style of mysteries on another end. There was enough similar elements in both sides that I really wished they came together into something more.
Dandy Cephei- Ashley's Song: Aw yeah, murder mystery! And this really worked for me as a mystery. A lot of things were just on point, Elle, the flashbacks, the bath scene. You had a lot of really great snippets of writing in this, like the weasel thing, and especially that end. Of all the stories, I think this one had the best climax. It felt like we were leading up to somewhere, and this one had a great somewhere. Great job you two! Couple nitpicks, mainly, why didn't Sergei wait till after the show to bring up the 'change in direction?'