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[Timu]

My excerpt is a scene in the beginning of the novel that starts with a violent beating:

Tonight a well known and dangerous criminal named Diablo Carter has a meeting with a snitch named Ricky who is tied to a chair surrounded by Diablo's henchmen in a secret warehouse.

“Okay Ricky, you have some serious explaining to do about you snitching on me.” said Diablo.

“I swear, I had no other choice, you have to understand and believe me, it was either I had to give out info or else they would had gotten me to do it by force, and you don't want those cops on me.” said Ricky.

“Fool, you should had never done that, now I can't trust you anymore, and just for that, I will beat the crap out of you, men, stand back as I beat him up.” said Diablo.

Diablo's henchmen walks away from Ricky and watched Diablo beat him up by punching him in the face multiple times.

“Diablo, please, this is very unnecessary, can't we work something out, please, just stop it.” said Ricky.

Blood comes out of Ricky's nose as Diablo continues to assault him.

“No, I will not stop until you get a beating you will remember, not to mention this will teach you a lesson to never do that ever again.” said Diablo.

“Please, stop, man, I'm serious, I'll doing anything for you, just listen to me for once, I beg of you to stop this.” said Ricky.

“Ricky, you know I'm in charge here, and whatever I say goes, so shut the hell up and take it like a man.” said Diablo.

“It would seriously suck to be that guy right now.” said a Diablo henchmen in his mind.

“My god, he is getting destroyed, Diablo doesn't play around, I actually kinda feel sorry for Ricky now.” said another Diablo henchmen in his mind.

After two minutes of punching him, Diablo finally stops to talk to him one last time.

“Oh man, thank you for stopping, I'm such a bloody mess now.” said Ricky.

“You also have two black eyes, but anyways, let that be a lesson to you man, if you reveal anything about me to the cops or whoever that would be after me, you will get this kind of punishment, and if you do it again, I will personally kill you myself so do not upset me like that ever again, do you understand Ricky?” asked Diablo.

“Yes, I perfectly understand man, I promise, I will obey you from now on.” said Ricky.

“Good, now clean yourself up, you're such a bloody mess.” said Diablo.

I didn't have names for Diablo's henchmen until later on(Daniel, Micheal, etc.) so I just called them Diablo's henchmen, lol, that will probably get changed in the finished version.

 

[Delio]

You know I always worry my scenes have far to much talking and not enough actions. I'm not sure though it's just me judging it myself lol. Also been cutting down on my fight scenes so they dont drag forever.

 

[Timu]

You know I always worry my scenes have far to much talking and not enough actions. I'm not sure though it's just me judging it myself lol. Also been cutting down on my fight scenes so they dont drag forever.

Yep, there are scenes like that, though since I'm in a rush I actually need to work on it as I usually do have long and descriptive action scenes that can go on more than the talking even.=p

Plus it's the beginning part that was added in later so it's not entirely finalized.

 

[GSR]

WC: 12338

Yeah I'm super guilty of overdialogue this year.

 

[JonnyDBrit]

How do you get revenge on someone proclaimed as the 'Conqueror of Heaven', said to make mountains break before her?

That is the question that comes to rest on the shoulders of Aiday, daughter of Aibek and Ikbar, when the forces of a Khan, serving the Great Khanum, take the life of a loved one from her. Armed with a quiver of endless arrows, a bow passed through her family for generations, and possessing power and legacy of which even she is unaware, Aiday's quest shall take her far from home.

I guess its a mildly spoiler-y synopsis since in story, that' she's out for revenge isn't strictly revealed yet - but implied through what she's interacted with, and her intended path.

 

[Burbeting]

WC: 12338

Yeah I'm super guilty of overdialogue this year.

That's me too. The cast just keeps talking at every scene, but that's partly because my nano is not action based, and is much more rooted in interactions between people, I guess.

But in the other hand, overdialogue is something I do always with my texts, and it's really annoying.

 

[YesNOnoNOYes]

WC: 11,785

finally caught up with daily limit x____x

 

[Delio]

Yep, there are scenes like that, though since I'm in a rush I actually need to work on it as I usually do have long and descriptive action scenes that can go on more than the talking even.=p

Plus it's the beginning part that was added in later so it's not entirely finalized.

Yeah I need to start cutting the chit chat in half. Lucky for me it's all been story relevant and not random nonsense so thats a plus.

 

[Evilisk]

WC: 11147

Ugh, it's happening. I'm starting to feel that second week fatigue already. I'm not sure I can keep this up. I'm not worried about completing NaNo (I always bounce back) but dang it! I don't want another year where I gotta play catch up in the last half of the month again.

 

[Moonkid]

I finally realized why my daily word counts were somewhat skewed and how I had been skipping days. It was because I kept writing and submitting past midnight without realizing, haha...

wc: 16316

If only I could be this focused at literally any other time of day but around midnight. Still, progress is progress.

 

[JonnyDBrit]

WC: 13248

Finished chapter 5, need to probably get 6 done in order to keep properly ahead of the average (as tracked by NaNoWriMo itself anyway). Now I get to do some action again.

 

[Cade]

I'm so guilty of overdialogue, but I feel like when you're writing about a journalist who's interviewing people to try to figure out why this town is so messed up, that comes with the territory. Not to mention I almost never have him alone, so he's usually talking to his friend. I should split them up for a while and write some good-ass descriptions, I guess.

 

[Ourobolus]

WC: 11,785

finally caught up with daily limit x____x

YAAAAY

 

[Vagabundo]

The Frozen Road

Fifty years after an asteroid impact the world is a dark frozen wasteland. Alicia lives in a nuclear powered enclave buried deep under a mountain. When an earthquake nearly destroys her home she must venture out into the world to save it.

^^^Synopsis/Blurb

I've 1k under my belt today so far. Only midday here now. I'm aiming for 10k by the end of the day. Tracking one day behind.

I also got a little of my outline done, so I'll work on that too.

 

[Aiii]

wc:19173

 

[Evilisk]

WC: 13346

Decided to hit today's limit as well (it's early morning for me now).

 

[Karu]

Puh, writing the last two hundred words while having to pee really badly is literally the freaking worst. =D

WC: 11718

 

[Ourobolus]

WC: 17348

Chugging along today.

 

[Timu]

You guys are writing fast, may leave me in the dust even!

WC: 11,785

finally caught up with daily limit x____x

Way to go girl!

 

[pitcairn55]

WC: 23094

The way things are going right now, I don't think I'm doing any planning for a story ever again. Writing fiction has been one of my primary hobbies for over 30 years. Assuming I manage to keep going with this novel, and it isn't a one-off, I'll be pretty annoyed it's taken me three decades to discover that, for me at least, making it up as you go along IS what you're supposed to do after all!

 

[HORRORSHØW]

WC: 26056

title/synopsis:

The Ballad of Talitha Kitsch: An Interdimensional Odyssey

Talitha Kitsch is a low-life techno grifter and junkie extraordinaire. During her downtime between hacking runs, she spies on the intimacies of unsuspecting victims. It's all fun and games to Talitha until one day she witnesses a ritualistic murder playing out in front of her on the victim's computer camera. The murder victim is a lithe and fragile thing who looks uncannily like Talitha. Disturbed by what she sees, Talitha sets out to investigate the murder, leading her to a world of demi-gods and demons trying to cross over into our world.

 

[Cyan]

Done with Day 6, and Burbeting still hangs onto the lead with 31,030, followed up by Grimløck and pitcairn55.

44 people still past the benchmark, which is great since we've just hit our first weekend! Loads of time to get ahead or catch up. (Jump in on the hangout in three and a half hours!)

Benchmark for today will be 11,667. You guys got this shit.

 

[Schlomo]

WC: 12974

Synopsis:

Das schwarze Gebet
Stuttgart in the year 2065. A rookie cop is posted to guard a right-wing politician, when strange mechanical towers suddenly rise out of the ground all over the city and machines start killing everyone in sight. Along with a mysterious woman and a 5 year old boy, they make a narrow escape and begin a perilous journey through the city streets.

 

[toythatkills]

WC: 11,919

First week was a big success! Probably the easiest week though, right?

Untitled

M. wakes up injured and in an unfamiliar place, lacking the knowledge of how he got there. All he knows is that the key to his safety lies in the wife and daughter he has no idea how to find.

 

[William]

WC: 13565

Got a little bit of planning ahead done today (in my head at least) so I know where I am going for a little bit longer. Still on track!

Keep up the great work everyone.

 

[Cade]

WC: 11613

Will write more later. Had to stop in the middle of an intense scene, dammit.

 

[Vagabundo]

I've decided to have another POV character; Dmitri is based in a Russian enclave deep in the Ural mountains. I've trying to develop a (long distance) relationship between the two POV character even though they are separated by 6000 miles for most of the novel, at least act I and II. So that's kinda giving me a headache. Also not great at doing romance.

Still I've given Dmitri his own subplot and tried to link it into my main one.

Any romance writers in the house care to give me a few tips? I do have a bit of a love triangle; Alicia is currently seeing some guy.

wc: 9520

I'll try get another 500 done before close of business today, however two Good Wife's are waiting. Damn,...

 

[Carlisle]

WC: 11613

Will write more later. Had to stop in the middle of an intense scene, dammit.

I read of a piece of writing advice from Hemingway that said the best time to take a break from writing is when you know exactly what's going to happen next and you're excited about it and can't wait to write it. Stopping after writing that part is the more dangerous thing to do for your motivation.

 

[XANDER CAGE]

WC: 11353

I guess I'll take on the task then. You get to be first. If people want to PM their synopsis to me that will make it easier, otherwise just post it in the thread and hopefully I'll find it.

Title - Empire of Glass (did some research and found this was also a doctor who episode title so, uh, tentative I guess)

Gothic fantasy. A bored young socialite who recently inherited her mother's glass-manufacturing business hosts a decadent dinner party for a rogue's gallery of the rich and famous. As well as numbing herself with wine and vapid company, she seeks to repair a long-broken friendship with one of the invited guests. After blacking out, she awakens in a mysterious forest, and is cursed by a witch. Doomed to eventual exile, she is rescued by a wandering hunter who agrees to protect her on the long, dangerous trek home. Despite her pleasant demeanor, the hunter seems to carry a few secrets of her own. The newly awakened witch must hide her affliction from her ward and anyone she meets along the way - but that proves difficult after a witchfinder paladin catches the pair's trail.

The chapters alternate between party flashbacks and the journey back, so the mystery is pieced together slowly. Kind of aiming for a weird mix of like, I dunno, Great Gatsby/Jane Eyre and The Fellowship of the Ring.

It's based on a comic script I recently finished, so I'm sort of simultaneously doing art and stuff for it as well.

 

[Burbeting]

I just realised that my story is 1/3 done, yet nano wise it should be 70% done...

...So is this turning into double nano? :x.

 

[Cyan]

I just realised that my story is 1/3 done, yet nano wise it should be 70% done...

...So is this turning into double nano? :x.

That's fine, dude. The goal for NaNo is 50k words in a month. If that's not enough to finish the story you want to tell, by all means keep on going and finish the story! This is actually pretty common, since modern novels are typically more around 90k words long, so if you're writing that type of story 50k probably isn't enough.

 

[Hop]

Going to stream a little before the hangout. I suggest people do the hangout instead of the stream, but y'know, whatever tickles your fancy.

 

[irriadin]

WC: 14420

I'll give a synopsis tomorrow.

 

[FlowersisBritish]

Everyone's little synopsiss sound great!

^^^Synopsis/Blurb

I've 1k under my belt today so far. Only midday here now. I'm aiming for 10k by the end of the day. Tracking one day behind.

I also got a little of my outline done, so I'll work on that too.

I was meaning to mention this, your cover looks great!

 

[Burbeting]

WC: 35344

Finished part 2/5 of the story. Parts 3 & 4 will be around the legth of part 2, but part 5 will be a short "finale" sort of thing, that would most likely be shorter.

 

[Cyan]

Going to stream a little before the hangout. I suggest people do the hangout instead of the stream, but y'know, whatever tickles your fancy.

whynotboth.gif

 

[RoyaleDuke]

Where's the hangout going to be?

I could talk about my book then try to write some more.

WC: 0 so far today. The total amount of words I have now is 36802.

Tying up Act I, setting up for Act II, in which there are revelations about the past of our intrepid detective and a hook for the final act and ending.

 

[Cyan]

Right, that would be useful!

Hangout starts in about half an hour. It's ten minutes of chat, then thirty minutes of writing with mics muted, repeated until we've gone for two hours. Webcams aren't required, though several of us will probably have them. Mics are helpful but also not required, as you can use the text chat.

The hangout link is (quote to see):

If anyone comes in a little late and we're already writing, that's fine, just get going with your writing and feel free to say hi in the text chat!

 

[toythatkills]

WC: 0 so far today. The total amount of words I have now is 36802.

How many have you written since NaNo began?

 

[HORRORSHØW]

less contractions = more words

at this point i'm just pulling shit out of the ether trying to hit the next word-count milestone

 

[RoyaleDuke]

Right, that would be useful!

Hangout starts in about half an hour. It's ten minutes of chat, then thirty minutes of writing with mics muted, repeated until we've gone for two hours. Webcams aren't required, though several of us will probably have them. Mics are helpful but also not required, as you can use the text chat.

The hangout link is (quote to see):

If anyone comes in a little late and we're already writing, that's fine, just get going with your writing and feel free to say hi in the text chat!

Thanks Cyan.

How many have you written since NaNo began?

About 2k

 

[Vagabundo]

Everyone's little synopsiss sound great!

Yeah, I agree. I can totally see some of them on the back cover in my local book shop.

I was meaning to mention this, your cover looks great!

Thanks!

 

[YesNOnoNOYes]

WC: 11,785

 

[Aon]

WC: 7413

Falling further behind with each passing day. Oh beautiful Switzerland, you cruel mistress.

 

[RoyaleDuke]

Since everyone is sharing synopsis quotes, here's mine.

The Tartarus Syndrome, Science Fiction/Horror

What is existence but a series of painful and traumatic experiences?

The year is 2245. Man kind has flown to the far reaches of space and found little to nothing about us, we have spread out and conquered worlds while rebuilding our own. All it took for humanity to pull itself together was nearly killing itself and the home it had.
Disgraced Legendary Detective Frank Boelin is past the edge, running from the past in a drug and alcohol infused haze. He awakes to find himself once again entrapped in another battle with his past, as he is called to investigate a High Priority case the likes no one had ever seen, and a dead man as the perpetrator. A spine tingling, psychological and psychedelic journey to redemption is often lead through hell.

Can Boelin solve the murders?

 

[FlowersisBritish]

Right, that would be useful!

Hangout starts in about half an hour. It's ten minutes of chat, then thirty minutes of writing with mics muted, repeated until we've gone for two hours. Webcams aren't required, though several of us will probably have them. Mics are helpful but also not required, as you can use the text chat.

The hangout link is (quote to see):

If anyone comes in a little late and we're already writing, that's fine, just get going with your writing and feel free to say hi in the text chat!

Three mintues to a fun time!

 

[Cyan]

Reposting for new page:

Hangout is go! It's ten minutes of chat, then thirty minutes of writing with mics muted, repeated until we've gone for two hours. Webcams aren't required, though several of us will probably have them. Mics are helpful but also not required, as you can use the text chat.

The hangout link is (quote to see):

If anyone comes in a little late and we're already writing, that's fine, just get going with your writing and feel free to say hi in the text chat!

 

[midramble]

Probably need to find a better way to word my sysnopsis

Leather Bound Traveler

A barely social mid-twenties information broker, living in the heart of an industrial gigacity, gets dragged into the fray of a genetic class war between it's lower and higher elevation population by an oddly dressed out-of-towner.

Also my nano name is the same as here.

Doing a lot of catching up today.

 

[tiggerkiddo]

Ugh might only have an hour at most to do any writing today...will try to get some work in. Might have to just make it up tomorrow since I'm a bit ahead of the curve...=/

 

[Burbeting]

WC: 36575

Calling it quits for today. Over 36k in a week feels ridiculous amount, yet here I am...