Man I miss reading everyone's stuff. It's good to be back! Once again, very awesome, engaging stuff all around. I know that some of you specifically asked for feedback, but the clock is ticking. Sorry won't be able to fit it in this time around. Pretty stinky of me.
1. Nezumi
2. Lunarian
3. Cyan
HM: adj_noun, Ourobolus, MikeM
HM: Tangent, who made me want to write a story starring a red panda as an excuse to post picture(s) of red pandas
Do it. In all seriousness, what is up with red pandas? Why do they get the upper hand on being one of the coolest animals on the planet?!
Tangent -- Perceived as Inanimate: You used greige as a meaning some combination of gray and beige. I hate you now : P. Seriously, got in a ridiculous argument with my wife over what a stupid term that was (ITS JUST CALLED BEIGE, GOD DAMN IT! IF YOU PUT GRAY IN IT, YOU JUST HAVE A TONE OF BEIGE!), but thats neither here nor there... Anyway, this was pretty close to being a cute little tale, but I felt calling out specific dialects was out of place (Where was this rabbit that it was running into a pack of coyotes were one of them was from Australia and hawks from Boston?), and the references to biological and psychological functions, while nauseatingly accurate (my nutritious droppings), detracted from the charm of the story. Loved the last paragraph of the first ending though, I would have otherwise called you out on that detail : )
Lol! For the record, a few years ago, a friend's friend or girlfriend or someone like that said, "Don't you love the walls?! I painted them GREIGE! It's a combination of gray and beige!" I couldn't believe it. I didn't see these walls, but I imagine they were boring. Point taken about the accent distraction. It's just that when I read the story to myself, I used those accents. I need to figure out how to execute stories so that my reading actually comes through. Or maybe that doesn't matter. I think Spencer was proud of his shit, to some level, so that's why it said, "nutritious droppings." But point taken, most definitely!
Other notes:
- Ashes, we missed you!
- Cyan, props for submitting a story!! Congrats for doing so! We are all crossing our fingers.