how strict are we on the word count?
How many of you guys have your first draft done? No such luck for me yet. Maybe late tonight.
I'm very close. Probably 300-400 words until the first draft is finished.How many of you guys have your first draft done? No such luck for me yet. Maybe late tonight.
How many of you guys have your first draft done? No such luck for me yet. Maybe late tonight.
I have nothing... Apart from an outline that I had on the back burner for almost six months now... Not yet concerned though.
Mike is probably getting anxious just reading this.
I once saw Cyan beat a person into a coma for being five words over the limit.
That's what I get for being a nerd about it. I'm almost done with 1st draft. It's going to be scene 1 of a longer story I want to write.
Did anyone read my first draft?
Back from vacation. 0 words written.
I call dibs on Cyan's words if he doesn't use them.
I don't think that's how it works, Mike. Synthesize that stuff, man.
Sure it is, man.
I've got nothing to, im more than willing to sacrifice my life blood for Mike's super story.
The snow was lighter at the foot of the forest as thick marenwoods reached towards the sky. The fluffy green and white canopy offered extra protection overhead; Garaman had been right, as this had the effect of leaving tracks more visible once he and Arasta got deeper into the trees.
They crossed an icy bridge over a frozen river in single file, Garaman leading his horse, and Arasta pulling Windclaw.
Look, Garaman said, pointing to the ground and moving off the path on the other side of the bridge so that Arasta could see the disturbed snow.
Merl, Arasta whispered. We have to hurry.
The blizzard whipped at Garaman's exposed skin as his horse ploughed through the deep snow.
Need another set of eyes.
As a reader, do you KNOW that Garaman is on top of his horse in this sentence, or do you think there's a chance they're walking side by side? Also, do you think he's naked when you read "exposed skin," or based on the context do you imagine that it's probably his face and neck? Overthinking, but want my writing to be clear. Probably need to re-write...
On first read, I didn't picture him on the horse, but this could change depending on context. Also, I think you could cut "exposed" and it would have the same effect, or replace it with something more specific. Context is key, though.
The blizzard whipped at Garaman's face as he snapped the reins tight in his hands, urging his horse to keep ploughing through the deep snow. The horseman pulled up his scarf and tightened it around his neck while his eldest daughter's griffin screeched overhead, its massive wings flapping and pushing against the northern wind.
"Do you see anything, Arasta?" Garaman called into the white abyss.
"Nothing!" Arasta yelled down, glancing over the side of her mount, her fur cloak dappled in pearly powder and glowing pale in virgin moonlight.
Yeah, was thinking about being more specific. Here's the re-written sentence and a bit more of the context...
...or something. Still sounds kind of shitty and probably needs to be totally re-thought and re-arranged.
P.S. if anyone wants feedback on a paragraph or two, I'd be happy to give it as well on here.
Old guard, is there anything against this? Moreso posting works in progress in the body of the thread and asking for feedback as we go.
Virgin moonlight during a blizzard?
Does alucard live in the tropics?
XD
The only light they could maintain would be magical. They'd never find the griffin again either, unless they're sticking to a major highway, and in a blizzard the right thing to do is to stop and dig in until it's over. It reads like they're in a wide plain at the moment, basically uncharted wilderness.
I actually really enjoyed the enthusiasm and conversation Alucard has been bringing to the threads of late tbh
It was just wording I was playing with. I'm not married to it. Good point about the blizzard. It's basically an open plain like you say, but they're familiar with the area and are headed towards a specific forest. Hmm, I could make some of these things clearer.
Yeah, I could tell about the virgin moonlight being a joke.
Still, sounds like a medieval level high fantasy setting? Would compasses exist? Need one for navigation in that circumstance.
Back from vacation. 0 words written.
Want to chime in and say I too still have 0 words written. I feel like we've been extra bad about being last minute as of late. Did someone put a curse on the thread? Did some disgruntled poster chant into a fire and now we've all be struck by crippling procrastination? Could it have beenJohn Dunbar?
draft two
Hey everybody, I'm just a random weird person (or something) who found this thread a couple days back and figured, since this is my first time coming across one of the creative writing challenges during the submission period, I should at least try to submit something. Here it goes:
Weather the Storm
(Wordcount approximately 809)
Hey everybody, I'm just a random weird person (or something) who found this thread a couple days back and figured, since this is my first time coming across one of the creative writing challenges during the submission period, I should at least try to submit something. Here it goes:
Weather the Storm
(Wordcount approximately 809)
I should hope not. That sounds dangerous.WORLDS COLLIDING
Thanks!Welcome aboard!
I just want to comment that I'm really liking the title on this one. It gives me a bit of a Leaf by Niggle feel for some reason.Yarbrough & Peoples Dont Stop
Words: 696
I actually really enjoyed the enthusiasm and conversation Alucard has been bringing to the threads of late tbh